Some people believe that professional athletes serve as positive role models for young people, while others argue that their behavior both on and off the field can have a negative influence.
Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Role models can inspire young people to improve themselves in life and work. While there are opinions that sportsmen can be great role models for young people, some people worry the athletes behavior in sport games and their private life can negatively affect the youth. In my opinion, children need to be taught to decide which qualities they should learn from their role models in sport and avoid copying harmful conducts of professional athletes.
There are good reasons that the youth can learn from the athletes. For example, Ronaldo has been practicing more than 10 hours everyday to be one of the best soccer players in the world. This alone is a good reminder for teenagers and young adults about the value of hard work at early ages and sacrifice to achieve great achievements. Additionally, in the past, sportspeople showed their tolerance and unity despite wars between their mother countries such as the U.S and Russia in Olympic competitions. If young people can learn to be open-minded like this, they can accelerate the speed of narrowing the differences and discrimination in their society and in the world.
However, because of the athletes’ fame, their undesirable behaviors’ impacts on young people are enlarged. It is not uncommon that some of the most famous athletes have indulged themselves too much by using drugs or partying overnight. Furthermore, athletes’ success sometimes comes together with bad personalities such as arrogance and aggressiveness. For example, Mike Tyson was notorious for his bite of his opponent’s ears in one historic boxing match. Under-18-year-old children may shallowly mimic these bad qualities, blindly hoping that those qualities may make other people look up to them.
Personally, I think it is better for the young people to build up the abilities to make proper judgements about the athletes. It is common that athletes can possess both great and poor qualities. Whether young people can access athletes’ admirable qualities to learn and avoid their poor behaviors is heavily dependent on the education children receive. Children may need to be trained to reflect on their role models through essays in schools or talks with parents.
In conclusion, while professional sportspeople possess admirable qualities to motivate children, the professionals’ poor behaviors can influence young people negatively. From my point of view, children need to be educated to filter athletes’ good qualities from bad examples to learn from.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 183, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'athletes'' or 'athlete's'?
Suggestion: athletes'; athlete's
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Line 3, column 128, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... has been practicing more than 10 hours everyday to be one of the best soccer players in...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: S
...en their mother countries such as the U.S and Russia in Olympic competitions. If ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2115.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 395.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35443037975 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9100756516 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544303797468 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9324543308 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.315789474 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7894736842 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63157894737 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340517259255 0.244688304435 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106889345681 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084078720887 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196900208194 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0739516677043 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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