The chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitors to a museum between 1997 and 2012

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The chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitors to a museum between 1997 and 2012.

The given bar chart illustrates the attendance figures for three different categories of visitors to the museum in the 5-year period, which is from 1997 to 2012.

'Overall, it can be seen that, even though the museum enjoyed the rise of visitors through the period, most of them are adults. Another point to make is that the number of adult travelers and special exhibition guests increased steadily during the period. On the other hand, visitors who belong to the 15-age group have a decrease in taking part in enjoying the museum.

From the beginning of the 5-year period, the adult group reached its highest point among the three groups at 300,100 people. Standing at a stable point at 120,000 people, young people under 15 years old had a better start than special guests, which were numbered at 28,000.

years by years, the museum still caught the attention of the adult group, whose figures stood at 380,000, though before 2012 it reached the highest point at 400,500. even though the figures of special exhibition travelers have the lowest starting point, they have steadily increased every year from 28,000 to 42,000. In contrast, the enjoyment of the under-15-age group declined gradually throughout the period, which is 120,000 to 82,000.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Years
...ests, which were numbered at 28,000. years by years, the museum still caught the a...
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Line 7, column 167, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Even
...t reached the highest point at 400,500. even though the figures of special exhibitio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, still, in contrast, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1056.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 207.0 196.424390244 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10144927536 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79308509922 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3456780297 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584541062802 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 279.9 283.868780488 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 17.7638834593 43.030603864 41% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 117.333333333 112.824112599 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 22.9334400587 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.23603664747 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138282741274 0.215688989381 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0689251334326 0.103423049105 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0792524209835 0.0843802449381 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117470263823 0.15604864568 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0978632094331 0.0819641961636 119% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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