The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in a government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Throughout human history, there has been little time when a society flourished without a leader of some sort. People in different fields have constantly debated whether cooperation or competition is more important for a successful leader. In discussing how to educate younger generations for leadership, some, such as the provided prompt, believe that the best way to prepare young people is to instill in them a sense of cooperation. In my opinion, I mostly agree with this viewpoint for the following two reasons, though I do concede that competition is also important.
To begin with, cooperation instead of competition sits at the basis of many difficult tasks; therefore, emphasizing the significance of cooperation at a young age should take priority. For example, in the discovery and invention of the initial CRISPR system, a tool that can cut a piece of DNA at specified locations and helps scientists modify genes, there exists a widely known competition between the Doudna-Charpentier groups and the Zhang group. However, numerous people worked on this project on both sides, and had it not been the group effort, the CRISPR system might not have been discovered because it is almost impossible for a single individual to accomplish this on their own. It is then safe to say that the significance of collaboration precedes that of competition. Many advancements in various fields were possible only because of cooperation. As a result, instilling a sense of cooperation in young people should be the priority.
In addition, learning how to cooperate also cultivates an individual's mind on a personal level, helping one become more amicable. Consider two students who are taught differently on leadership. A student whose teacher instills competition first will see the world full of enmity as they think everyone wants to gain advantage of them; as a result, this student is very likely to treat their peers defensively, losing many potential friendships. On the other hand, a student whose teacher chooses to priorize a sense of cooperation will see the world full of opportunities that they are free to explore; therefore, they are more open-hearted and are more willing to make connections to other people. An individual is often more malleable at younger age because fewer ideas are instilled in their minds and for shorter time. Moreover, humans are social animals. Therefore, underscoring the sense of cooperation while preparing one for leadership is extremely important as it helps an individual become more accepted socially.
However, I do concede that a sense of competition should not be neglected during the leadership education because young people need to practice when to compete and when to concede. For instance, maintaining good foreign relations while earning benefits for one's country is an intricate task and requires a delicate balance. Since resources are limited, besides learning how to protect a nation's external relationships, a young political science student should also study how to gain the most benefit for their country without disrupting the stable status quo.
To conclude, while a sense of competition is also crucial for a successful leader and cannot be overlooked, instilling a sense of cooperation in young people should be prioritized since it more directly contributes to scientific advancements and can make one a more socially acceptable person.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, look, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2874.0 2235.4752809 129% => OK
No of words: 540.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32222222222 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05255520482 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 215.323595506 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512962962963 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 915.3 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.7035026359 60.3974514979 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.857142857 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7142857143 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.52380952381 5.21951772744 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370129642016 0.243740707755 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103984665688 0.0831039109588 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873778958954 0.0758088955206 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216086693279 0.150359130593 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780109566882 0.0667264976115 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 100.480337079 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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