A CLASS OUTING
Last week my class went on a class outing. We decided to go to a small hillside called “Hillside”. We left school at six o'clock in the morning. Our teacher'd expected us to arrive there at half past nine, but one tiny problem made us delay two hours. Everything was happened according to plan, then suddenly our bus stopped. The driver realized that we ran out of gas. The nearest gas station is opposite from Everburn Hillside, therefore we turned back and it took one hour to reach the gas station. It's more than worse when a gas station worker lost his tool so we had to wait 30 minutes form him to find it. Finally, we left the station and head to Slumpy Hillside.
As soon as we got there, we set up our tents and had lunch. We were all starving. After lunch, we took a break. When we fell asleep, dark clouds came out of nowhere. The thunder woke us up. Raindrops fell upon our tents. Then the rain started to end. A rainbow appeared. I and my friends raced to the end of the rainbow. We saw a large, old, brown bag. We brought this bag back with us. When we were back to our camp, I and my friends were exhausted because the bag is very heavy. It was filled chocolate coins in shiny, yellow paper wrap.
After that I saw something blue. We headed to the blue thing. We soon discovered that it was a river. Out teacher set up a fishing contest. We took our fishing rods and baits. Luckily, Harry caught the biggest fish. Our teacher says that it is trout. We went back to school at 6 o'clock in the afternoon. Our parents came get us home. We all felt tired but we enjoyed a great time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: o'clock
...alled “Hillside”. We left school at six oclock in the morning. Our teacherd expected u...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e coins in shiny, yellow paper wrap. After that I saw something blue. We headed to...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 280, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: o'clock
...t is trout. We went back to school at 6 oclock in the afternoon. Our parents came get ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, so, then, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 24.0651302605 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1295.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.23202614379 5.12529762239 83% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.21553443866 2.80592935109 79% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598039215686 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 382.5 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.60771543086 81% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 5.43587174349 368% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 16.0721442886 199% => OK
Sentence length: 9.0 20.2975951904 44% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.4902510074 49.4020404114 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 40.46875 106.682146367 38% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 9.5625 20.7667163134 46% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.03125 7.06120827912 15% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 23.0 3.4128256513 674% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0521537674469 0.244688304435 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0184560627768 0.084324248473 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102759008607 0.0667982634062 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0387547332248 0.151304729494 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548074693327 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 3.3 13.0946893788 25% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 87.72 50.2224549098 175% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 3.3 11.3001002004 29% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 5.77 12.4159519038 46% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.71 8.58950901804 78% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 5.6 10.1190380762 55% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 6.0 10.7795591182 56% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 0.67 Out of 6
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