People become more materialistic. Discuss
Can you imagine living without money? Is it possible to live without money in this cash-driven world? It has been said that money makes the world goes round. Hate to point out the obvious but it is true. In today's world where consumerism is rather rampant, materialism has become the social norm and making money has become the central focus of most people. People has become more materialistic in nature and some of them even abandon humanitarian values in the pursuit of wealth. This bodes ill for the nation, especially when materialism greases the wheels of evil operations such as human trafficking or corruption. Given the centrality of the issue at hand, it is highly appropriate for us to scrutinise the reasons why people nowadays are more materialistic and such information will steer us away from ignorance, as cited by Martin Luther, “Nothing in this world is much more dangerous than sincere ignorance and conscientious stupidity.”
To begin with, each individual is affected by materialism to some extent in this day and age because hedonism is becoming an uprising trend. Highly materialistic people often think erroneously that wealth brings happinness to their lives. Consequently, they are geared towards making more money so that they can lead a carefree lifestyle, which is quite popular nowadays. In this case, we could see that materialism overrides human's common sense and clouds one's judgement. People who sink into the dark pit of materialism may sideline the things which matter the most in their life, namely family relationship, friendship or health when their material desire is given more attention above all else. Ironically, they do not have enough time to spend the wealth they have or simply enjoy leisure time due to heavy workload. While hedonism spurs them to work hard to bring in more income in order to live a luxurious lifestyle, materialism on the other hand stirs the feelings of vanity in human themselves.
It may be said without fear of contradiction that peer pressure also joins hand in provoking materialism in human. In a sense, all and sundry has a desire to fit in, whether of school, work or in social circles. For this reason, people tend to purchase branded goods that either perceived as fashionable, trendy or high class or that fit into a particular subculture or peer group. They believe that branded items are symbols of status and wealth which will contribute to greater acceptance.
Furthermore, peer influence has a direct bearing to our self-esteem. We feel confident if we are being accepted by our friends and we feel humilated if we are being ostracised. Therefore, many people tend to spend beyond their means for branded items which they actually could not afford. Ugly rears it head when they slip into the vicious cycle of debt and grapple with all sorts of financial difficulties. Needless to say, it is the “keeping up with the Joneses” which is indirectly caused by peer pressure that epitomizes materialism in our society.
In addution, development of manifold electronic and daily usage gadgets have germinated germinated a desire of prosperity among denizens. Everyday, we are bombarded with a myriad of advertisment of the latest branded items, for instance the Iphone, genuine LV bags, snazzy leather shoes and the like. Markets are utilising a slew of promotional gimmicks to seduce consumers to purchase their products. As a mattrr of fact, they often target on children as they know children easily get fascinated towards unrealistic belongings. As a corollary, children may become materialistic in nature and they tend to demand the branded items from their parents. If their parents do not satisfy their material wants, some of them even resort to channels which flout the law in order to obtain the material items they want. For instance , they may involve themselves in petty theft or larceny. Hence, it is crystal clear to claim that the exposure to media inculcates the spirit of materialism in modern man, especially children who are susceptible to external influences.
It is indeed a sad reality that people nowadays become more materialistic and are loaded with pratical money making ideas but with few scruples. In this context of discussion, parents should play the pivotal role of educating their children spend their money judiciously and lead a frugal lifestyle. They government should join hands in organising campaigns as to mitigate the spirit of materialism which is rampant in our society. Janwillem Van De Wetering once cited, “Greed is a fat demon with a small mouth and whatever you feed it is never enough.” Indisputably, materialism turns human into ugly creatures with loads of pratical money making ideas but few scruples. Bearing in mind, success is not measured in the amount of dollars you make, but rather the amount of lives you impact. Wealth can never be the yardstick of one's success, so do not be the slave of money and start to pursue a meaningful and fulfilled life.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 458, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...verrides humans common sense and clouds ones judgement. People who sink into the dar...
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Line 9, column 78, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: germinated
...electronic and daily usage gadgets have germinated germinated a desire of prosperity among denizens. ...
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Line 9, column 139, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[2]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: Every day
... a desire of prosperity among denizens. Everyday, we are bombarded with a myriad of adve...
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Line 9, column 824, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e material items they want. For instance , they may involve themselves in petty th...
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Line 13, column 829, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...t. Wealth can never be the yardstick of ones success, so do not be the slave of mone...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, therefore, while, as to, for instance, such as, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 13.1623246493 243% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 10.4138276553 288% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 24.0 7.30460921844 329% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 72.0 24.0651302605 299% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 113.0 41.998997996 269% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4195.0 1615.20841683 260% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 824.0 315.596192385 261% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09101941748 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.35774207935 4.20363070211 127% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77819503937 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 414.0 176.041082164 235% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502427184466 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1299.6 506.74238477 256% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 5.43587174349 294% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 37.0 16.0721442886 230% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.4104791863 49.4020404114 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.378378378 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2702702703 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.32432432432 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 8.67935871743 230% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172987417443 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0419124026562 0.084324248473 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0827024142667 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0938198752934 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0753648441911 0.056905535591 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 208.0 78.4519038076 265% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.33 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 458, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...verrides humans common sense and clouds ones judgement. People who sink into the dar...
^^^^
Line 9, column 78, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: germinated
...electronic and daily usage gadgets have germinated germinated a desire of prosperity among denizens. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 139, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[2]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: Every day
... a desire of prosperity among denizens. Everyday, we are bombarded with a myriad of adve...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 824, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e material items they want. For instance , they may involve themselves in petty th...
^^
Line 13, column 829, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...t. Wealth can never be the yardstick of ones success, so do not be the slave of mone...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, therefore, while, as to, for instance, such as, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 13.1623246493 243% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 10.4138276553 288% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 24.0 7.30460921844 329% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 72.0 24.0651302605 299% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 113.0 41.998997996 269% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4195.0 1615.20841683 260% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 824.0 315.596192385 261% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09101941748 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.35774207935 4.20363070211 127% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77819503937 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 414.0 176.041082164 235% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502427184466 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1299.6 506.74238477 256% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 5.43587174349 294% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 37.0 16.0721442886 230% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.4104791863 49.4020404114 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.378378378 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2702702703 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.32432432432 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 8.67935871743 230% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172987417443 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0419124026562 0.084324248473 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0827024142667 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0938198752934 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0753648441911 0.056905535591 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 208.0 78.4519038076 265% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.33 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.