What was the biggest obstacle you faced in your life? How did you overcome this?
I had been dancing a dancesport for about 6 years. Dancing was part of my life, body, and sense. But, I faced a difficult decision that leaving my hobby. My parents decided to this. Because I would be entering high school and my little brother would be born soon this year. They had already talked about leaving me from the dance club when I understood about this. So there was no opportunity to resist and I accepted this directly. These were sadness for me because of devoting a lot of time and my whole senses for dancing. And then, my dancing time had ended so I realized that I will have to spend my pastime for other things. Well, when entering high school, I decided to develop my academic skills and extracurricular activities. Since then, I have learned and been interested in a lot of new things, including English, math, and volunteering. Also, I got several rewards for this.It was the most difficult and heartbreaking decision back then, but it was a meaningful decision that gave me a lot of new opportunities and memorable. In the end, I realized that everything has its own time.
- What kind of activity could you do all day forgetting about time and space Why
- What was the biggest obstacle you faced in your life How did you overcome this 56
- 1 Some students have a background identity interest or talent so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it If this sounds like you please share your story 16
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 888, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...g. Also, I got several rewards for this.It was the most difficult and heartbreakin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 16.0 41.998997996 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 901.0 1615.20841683 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 195.0 315.596192385 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62051282051 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 4.20363070211 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73994005991 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 176.041082164 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579487179487 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 282.6 506.74238477 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.5967842816 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.3076923077 106.682146367 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0 20.7667163134 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.23076923077 7.06120827912 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.38176352705 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0856203780493 0.244688304435 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0370852422133 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404584190169 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0856203780493 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 13.0946893788 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 50.2224549098 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.3001002004 60% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.92 12.4159519038 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 78.4519038076 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 9.78957915832 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.33 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.