How widely do you think the problem spreads that people spend too much time on work than their personal life/family/leisure and experience time shortage? What problems will it cause?

One of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is the colossal upsurge in the spending too much of time on work. There is a widespread worry that this will only lead to a myriad of concerns in the society. In my opinion, spending too much time on work has more negative impacts than positives in the society.

On the one hand, critics may point out that one of the most significant benefits of giving more time for work is gaining expertise on the related field. For example, Doctors, unlike in the past, now are gaining more experience, as more people are going to hospitals for their check ups.

On the other hand, there are a number of arguments in favour of my stance. One of the most preponderant ones is that giving more time for work than personal life have negative consequences for their family in various ways. Firstly, there will be very less bonding with children and wife, such as a security officer who know very little about his daughter. According to "Times Magazine December 2017 edition", the proportion of people working more hours only focusing in their career have increased from 10 percent to 30 percent today. Secondly, a large portion of people suffer from diseases, because of less or no physical exercise.

Lastly, in my opinion, the government of Australia is taking great initiatives in educating its nationals against the negative impacts of giving more time for work than their personal life. Citizens are being encouraged to work fix time and get some time for personal life.

In view of the arguments outlined above, one can conclude that despite having some benefits, the drawbacks of spending more time on work than their personal life are indeed too dire to ignore.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, for example, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.5418719212 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 6.10837438424 65% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 8.36945812808 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 5.94088669951 84% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 20.9802955665 71% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 31.9359605911 150% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.75862068966 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1433.0 1207.87684729 119% => OK
No of words: 294.0 242.827586207 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87414965986 5.00649968141 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5337487877 2.71678728327 93% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 139.433497537 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527210884354 0.580463131201 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 459.9 379.143842365 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.6157635468 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 1.56157635468 256% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.65517241379 192% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.5024630542 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4803523902 50.4703680194 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.230769231 104.977214359 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6153846154 20.9669160288 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38461538462 7.25397266985 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.12807881773 121% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.33497536946 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 2.75862068966 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269060122982 0.242375264174 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107521649539 0.0925447433944 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0817011148873 0.071462118173 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1748335394 0.151781067708 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.06347525552 0.0609392437508 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 12.6369458128 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.1260098522 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.9458128079 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 11.5310837438 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.32886699507 99% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 55.0591133005 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.94827586207 106% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.3980295567 104% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 72.0 Out of 90
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