Unemployment is a fairly popular word these days. Many times, urbanisation is seen as an answer to the widespread unemployment. Though, in this essay, I will argue that urbanisation is not a solution to unemployment.
There are many reasons why people support urbanisation to combat unemployment. Firstly, urbanisation opens up opportunities in every sector. New industries provide employment choices to the people. Secondly, industrialisation is accompanied by better housing, education, medical and transport facilities. Hence, quality of life improves for many.
Despite the merits of urbanisation, there are many demerits we overlook.The following reasons demonstrate the argument-Uneven population distribution – Urbanisation leads to a change in demographics. The urban areas are more densely populated than the rural areas. For example, even though Tokyo is the most populated cities in the world, the population in rest of Japan is dwindling. This leads to a neglect of the villages which have been untouched by urbanisation.
Poor living conditions – A sudden demographic shift can be overwhelming. The changes in the city are not properly mapped out. Hence, illegal housing increases. This also puts a lot of pressure on resources, education, medical facilities etc. Rapid crime growth and poor sanitation are also a consequence. For example, every urbanized city in the world has a higher rate of crime, mental illnesses etc compared to the other states of their respective countries.
Extreme competition – A large population increases the competition in the job market. For one vacant post, there will be several qualified professionals applying for it. Even urbanisation doesn’t guarantee that a person would get employment according to his/her qualifications.
To sum up, urbanisation is a short term solution to unemployment. Rather than creating urbanised hubs, even development across the country should be the realized. Imparting skills and education can help the poor make a better living.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.5418719212 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 6.10837438424 98% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 8.36945812808 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 5.94088669951 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 20.9802955665 57% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 31.9359605911 103% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 5.75862068966 521% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 1207.87684729 143% => OK
No of words: 304.0 242.827586207 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.69078947368 5.00649968141 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.37304370305 2.71678728327 124% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 139.433497537 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631578947368 0.580463131201 109% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 379.143842365 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.57093596059 115% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 1.56157635468 256% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 12.6551724138 190% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.5024630542 59% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9513560245 50.4703680194 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.0833333333 104.977214359 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.6666666667 20.9669160288 60% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 7.25397266985 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.12807881773 145% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 2.75862068966 399% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 2.91625615764 206% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0144269602245 0.242375264174 6% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00488030052637 0.0925447433944 5% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0162014675887 0.071462118173 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00774188218127 0.151781067708 5% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0113405762966 0.0609392437508 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 12.6369458128 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.38 53.1260098522 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.9458128079 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.83 11.5310837438 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.32886699507 116% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 55.0591133005 189% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.94827586207 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.3980295567 65% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.5123152709 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.1111111111 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 10.0 Out of 90
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