Advances in transportation and communication like the airplane and the telephone have changed the way nations interact with each other in a global society. Choose another technological innovation that you think is important.Give specific reasons for your choice.
Technology has improved in all sections that leads to a successful life. In modern life there are airplanes for transportation and telephones for communication which helps us to interact between nations in a easy way. Another invention i want to mention is computers and internet. I have many reasons to hold this.
First reason is we can easily communicate through the internet which saves us time. If we want to send our ideas or proposals we can send through the emails. This will really helpful between nations to send their planned business proposals or other decisions through the internet. For example, if country like united states of america wants to start a business or company in India, then president of U.S.A can made a list of their investment in the business, advantages, profits and taxes and he can send it to India prime minister. So he can analyze and come to a conclusion before they meet each other.
Second reason is social websites like face book and twitter connecting so many people from different countries. We can find our old and childhood friends. For example, my friend shifted to China in seventh class. From then no contact between us before i met him on face book. Moreover internet helps us to find everything that we are not familiar with. Through telephone we can only talk but through internet we can talk and see the person with whom we are talking. We can see the place where we want to go and we we can how much distance to travel there.
To conclude, we can do good communication in less time and we can send our message to many people at a time with the internet so i choose internet as a great technological innovation.
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