Do you agree or disagree with this idea: Young people nowadays don’t give enough time to helping their communities.
Although young people could have done the biggest actions in favor of our community, we cannot underestimate the role of the young generation now. People had more free time to manage their help to people because of the fewer obsessions. In addition, help the communities with its issues can be done in various ways which are necessary to know of them.
People in the modern time are involved with more challenging life than the people were in the past. Life is changing over time with the fastest speed. Apparently, more facilities in the modern time should improve the way of living in every aspect, but it cause people to be busier. Young people have the large goals and wishes that make them far from the communities. I myself, as a member of the young generation, can realize how much we should try to achieve our requirement in the competing world. Education, finding job, making money, getting married, and so on aren't as easy as those were in the past. Everywhere that we go for taking a step toward our aims, there are a long turn of the people who are in the same situation as we are. For example, I experienced the whole difficulties of the being accepted for the university in my favorite major so that I have never forgotten those hardships after a few years. I can speculate and understand that living for the youth has become so hard that sometimes we cannot find any comparison between today's lives and the past lives. Therefore, it is not reasonable and wise to say that young people are less commitment to the communities rather than before.
Help can be defined in numerous ways in the communities by the youth. The way of helping can be different from working directly to writing a book or doing research. In fact, the young individuals are helping their country and people in forms which aren't visible at first glance. For example, we can mention that the youth, who performs the art work, is useless for the other people. While, entertaining of general population in the boring and confusing world is an important one. No wonder, everybody is making effort and attempt in favor of the communities where we should have absolute relation with each other.
In my opinion, young people are involved with lots of struggles rather than before. So, I disagree with the idea in which young people have less positive influence on their surroundings. In addition I think we should be more meticulous to recognize all forms of helping the youths in the communities.
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Sentence: Apparently, more facilities in the modern time should improve the way of living in every aspect, but it cause people to be busier.
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Sentence: Everywhere that we go for taking a step toward our aims, there are a long turn of the people who are in the same situation as we are.
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