Final version 154:
In some countries people are no longer allowed to smoke in many public places and office buildings. do you think this is good rule or bad rule?
Although people should be free and relaxed, they should be respectful of other people rights. The way I see, it is a good rule that people in some special places such as buildings, and offices be prohibited from smoking because there are some who are bothered from. In addition, smoking in an official place makes others think that they are free to break the law and do everything that they want to. Therefore, people must be limited by the rule in some places.
One of my main reasons that I am opposite of smoking everywhere is that it may hurt and bother others. People are different and they have enormous characters. So, they might not to like smell smoke or even smoke cause that they don't breathe easily and comfortably.For example, some people are sensitive of smoke and start coughing for a few hours. In addition, smoke might be more dangerous for some who have heart problems.Unfortunately, there are some people who forget that they should notice about others and take care of sick ones. In fact, we limit smoking in some places because we want to show we pay attention to people in our vicinity.
My second reason on the limitation of smoking is that with this kind of rule we give discipline and formal form to our work and businesses.People usually smoke in places where they are relaxed and free and smoking in an official place makes it a mess. For instance, people are free in a coffee shop and they can laugh with loud noise and smoke freely because that place is defined in a way that they enjoy being there. But, in official buildings or places the public come to do something important or work as a workforce.
Therefore, the place of work is not an ordinary place like coffee shop and it must have some rules which make it specific and official space. As a result, places with limitation of smoking try to express that those places have an atmosphere of work and business.To the best of my knowledge, smoking should be prevented in some places here are official, in particular, because smoking can bothers others and causes an official place have no the form and sense of working.
Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
---|---|---|---|
2013-08-17 | saharpouya | 80 | view |
- People remember special gifts or presents they have received. Why? 70
- TOEFL integrated writing: fuel-cell engines 60
- GRE: “Scientific theories, which most people consider as fact, almost invariably prove to be inaccurate. Thus, one should look upon any information described as factual with skepticism since it may well be proven false in the future” 60
- Integrated TPO 6 80
- 119. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? 80
Sentence: As a result, places with limitation of smoking try to express that those places have an atmosphere of work and business.To the best of my knowledge, smoking should be prevented in some places here are official, in particular, because smoking can bothers others and causes an official place have no the form and sense of working.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to can bothers and others
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 379 350
No. of Characters: 1692 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.412 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.464 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.277 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.071 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.014 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.378 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.564 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5