Many families have important traditions that family members share. What is one of your family's important traditions? Use specific reasons and details to support your response.

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Many families have important traditions that family members share. What is one of your family's important traditions? Use specific reasons and details to support your response.

Tradition reflects what people often act and becomes habit. Tradition creates an image of people and shows the uniqueness of it. It occurs every where like office, society, and even family environment. In relates, I have my family's tradition which is essential and celebrates it every chance that we have. The most main tradition is hanging out in the early of month.

I and my family, which consist of father, mother, two little sisters, and a youngest brother, must have time to gather in the beginning month. My mother creates that event and becomes ritual of my family. The aim is closeness am...

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Sentence: I know that my family members always busy in their community like father spend his entire weekday in office and my brother has a lot of activities such as football player in school and playing guitar in his band.
Description: The fragment father spend his is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace spend with verb, past tense

Sentence: My mother prepare the all ingredients like meat, chicken, barbecue-sauce, butter, and so on.
Description: The token the is not usually followed by a determiner/pronoun, pre-quantifier
Suggestion: Refer to the and all

Sentence: Because my father expert in cooking then he make it for us.
Description: The fragment he make it is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace make with verb, past tense

Sentence: In addition, the role of this event is family's member should full.
Description: The word full is not usually used as an adverb
Suggestion: Refer to full

Sentence: To sum up, gather once time in a month is my family's member tradition.
Description: The fragment , gather once is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace gather with gathering

wrong: I and my family; I and my sibling
correct: My family and I; My sibling and I

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No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.156 21.0

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No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
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No. of Characters: 1861 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
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Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.156 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.648 7.5
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Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.271 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.435 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.171 0.07
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