People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign language.
In my opinion people should traveling in their own country, it is bring them more benefits.
First, people working hard then for the rest they travel, they save money for traveling and got relax during vacation. In my point of view, people should spend their money in their country rather than in foreign country. It is due to flourishing their own tourist industry and bring a lot of amount of money in the country thus the money has not been spend in another country. People spend their money to settling in hotels and take meals in restaurant, furthermore they buy some souvenir for friends and family and all this need to spend money.
Second, while people traveling in their own country they can get familiar with touristic site of country. In addition, they meet another people of country and know their way of living, working and their accent actually. People commonly obtain some information about their own history through books in school and sometimes they do not visit the historical site. I content that it is better to know our history and roots then get familiar with other nations. In order to acquire knowledge about our ancestors, traveling in country is better way to only read books. Nothing can replace with the joy of visiting our country and knowing about culture and history.
The last but not least, the most problem of traveling to foreign country is language, people speak in different language, and they have different culture even food. These factors make reluctant to travel abroad, they tend to spend their holidays in their own country, and strange language and culture make people to feel inconvenient.
To wrap it up, traveling abroad is not a good choice to spend holidays because of unfamiliar language, culture, attitude and even foods. It is more convenient to spend money in our own country that cause to improving tourist industry. Furthermore many people do not familiar with they own history , traveling around their own country is a motivation to learn more about their native country.
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Sentence: In my opinion people should traveling in their own country, it is bring them more benefits.
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Sentence: Furthermore many people do not familiar with they own history , traveling around their own country is a motivation to learn more about their native country.
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