At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

The young population has taken the elderly over in several nations recently. The current trend has brought both benefits and drawbacks; however, I do believe that the former outweighs the latter because of various convincing reasons.

On the one hand, the increasing number of young adults has caused two significant disadvantages for society. Firstly, a great burden on education appears. Teenagers who have finished their high schools have to go to vocational schools, colleges, and universities in order to have professional skills for their future career; therefore, a great number of bucks is required to spend on their study from families and governments as well. Secondly, the younger citizens, the more crimes occurred. For example, in some developing countries, social juvenile crimes like child abuse, drug abuse, robbery, road offenses and the like have resulted in various detrimental consequences for society and also individuals.

On the other hand, the significantly large number of young citizens has contributed greatly to society. In terms of a national economy, the trend provides a great number of labor-force since hardly does the economy develop without the contribution of young employees. In fact, in some industrializing nations, young workers are needed in many fields from heavy industries to modern services; therefore, the life standard also improves. From the social perspective, younger citizens help build a fast-moving society. The elderly cannot update the latest news compared to the young adults; therefore, a society with a big number of the youth is full of new fashionable styles and latest trends from all around the world.

From all the above-mentioned, a society with more young citizens than elders also has some disadvantages; however, the advantages are far greater. Authorities should focus on building welfare systems which assist on students’ education to reduce the severe effects of the lack of study.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, in fact, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 5.0 24.0651302605 21% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51655629139 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96404043868 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592715231788 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 14.0 2.52805611222 554% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.4999598264 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42857142857 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184270987238 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591178881663 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526153866062 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0997843925263 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380909069771 0.056905535591 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.8 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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