Nowadays sports is a big business with high earnings for professional sports people and companies involved both financially and other ways Is this a positive or negative development for sports

In the last decade, professional sports got popular like never before, because of which the athletes and the various business associated with them grown reacher. There is a portion of the population who believe that it has a detrimental effect on sports as well as society, Whereas the other portion thinks in the contrast. I certainly agree with the thought process of the latter group of people.

At the outset, people who assume that professional sports turning into a business with high monetary value feared that it will belittle the value of sports and make players more money-oriented. The most important reason to think this way can be that there are myriad companies trying to promote their brand and products to mass and nothing can be a better channel to do that than sports match broadcast. Hundreds of people are already present in the stadium at the same time thousands of other people are watching it on television. And for that purpose, such organizations prompt athletes from that sport, which promises them to be more popular and financially uplifted. Therefore, any player is likely to focus more on getting renowned than playing better for the team or country.

However, another pivotal facet of this argument is that making professional sports a business will not just help sports to be popular but will also encourage many youngsters to play them. The advertisements through the good player will help the public to relate themselves with the athlete as well as sport. Another key point that should be considered is that when sports authority starts earning through such promotions in between the match, they get the flexibility to arrange better facilities for the sportsperson which may eventually help them to perform better in the future. At the last, young people will start considering sports as one of their career opportunities instead of just a hobby.

Considering the aforementioned discussion, I strongly suggest that the advantages of professional sports becoming a high-earning business is outweighing the disadvantages and therefore I support the idea that it should find ways to involve more business with it and help athletes for the betterment of their lives.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, whereas, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1848.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 359.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14763231198 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81674140972 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537604456825 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.0902877711 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.153846154 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6153846154 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30769230769 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.386172198031 0.244688304435 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132303167352 0.084324248473 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670631956847 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244052897286 0.151304729494 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473875010077 0.056905535591 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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