Successful and famous may well be in everybody’s mind, but having perseverance in
doing the same thing over and over again could be far from a walk in the park.
Growing up in a challenging environment may affect people upbringing and also
motivate them harder in reaching their dreams. For sports star or artists that already
successful, they too may become an inspiration and role model for young people
around the world in reaching their own dreams.
To begin with, people in Nigeria had to walk hundreds of miles to reach their
neighbouring village, for some it might even take days to do this. People might argue
how this difficulty could hinder them from reaching their dreams, but not for Usain
Bolt. He starts to practice running since early childhood, reaching villages to villages.
For his perseverance and skill, he won a gold medal during Olympic. This can be seen
how the environment affects people and motivate them to reach their dreams.
In addition, sports stars and movie artists are already famous and have accomplished
many awards. They too could be an inspiration for young people around the world in
achieving their dreams. For example, Muhammad Ali, he inspires teenager with how
professional boxing can take you to places, earn a good life and keep you away from
being trouble on the street. This example is a clear positive sign how person’s
successful life would affect others in their own environment.
It is felt strongly how external factors play a major part in people’s life. It is hope
that external environment and other people’s success stories would continue to
inspire young people in pursuing their dreams and accomplishment.
- Some types of employment are more suitable for men and other types of employment are more appropriate for women.'To what extent do you agree with this statement? Support your point of view with reasons and examples from your own experience. 85
- Schools should prepare students for university. rather than for work,' How far do you agree with this statement~ Support your point of view with reasons and/or examples from your own experience or observations 77
- Some types of employment are more suitable for men and other types of employment are more appropriate for women.'To what extent do you agree with this statement? Support your point of view with reasons and examples from your own experience. 80
- Many people think that regions affect successful person. What is your opinion about native region and accomplished person’s influence on the region he belongs to. 77
- As a result of advances in medical care, average life expectancy is increasing for men and women. Do you think most people will see this as a positive development? What are the disadvantages of an ageing population for individuals and society? Support you 85
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, well, for example, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.5418719212 85% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 6.10837438424 196% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 8.36945812808 167% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 5.94088669951 34% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 20.9802955665 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 31.9359605911 110% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.75862068966 174% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1447.0 1207.87684729 120% => OK
No of words: 278.0 242.827586207 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20503597122 5.00649968141 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 3.92707691288 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7709728366 2.71678728327 102% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 139.433497537 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571942446043 0.580463131201 99% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 379.143842365 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.6157635468 217% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 1.56157635468 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.71428571429 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6551724138 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.5024630542 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.879384005 50.4703680194 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.357142857 104.977214359 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 20.9669160288 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92857142857 7.25397266985 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 21.0 4.12807881773 509% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.33497536946 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 6.9802955665 186% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 2.75862068966 36% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 2.91625615764 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113931799506 0.242375264174 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475721332959 0.0925447433944 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0318782998222 0.071462118173 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0390010138081 0.151781067708 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306746691094 0.0609392437508 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 12.6369458128 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.1260098522 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.9458128079 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 11.5310837438 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.32886699507 96% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 55.0591133005 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.94827586207 136% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.3980295567 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.5123152709 124% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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