Everyone regarding to their viewpoint may maintain different directions toward the way of spending leisure time. Many may have the conviction that any activities in the same direction as their main task would be more beneficial while others believe that being involved in activities which are far different than those of they regularly do at work would boost their productivity better. I am strongly unanimous with later group because of two reasons I will vastly explore in following essay.
To begin with, doing activities either physical or mental completely different from what people do at their work not only will benefit them in multitude ways such as building confidence, gaining new experience, expanding their horizon, named but a few but it also help them discover other aspects of their personalities which increase their awareness of their needs and what really makes them happy in life. For instance I have been working as a civil engineer for 3 years since I majored in civil engineering at university; but most of the time at weekends, I have been attending in theater performances and at that time I realize that once I entered in the hall of theater a huge volume of feeling of peace and secure came to me and during the performance I would think about nothing but the way the performers act. At that time I have always been waiting the whole week to experience that feeling again, so one day I made a great decision and enrolled in theater classes to become an actress. Now I am very satisfied with my choice and I am more productive rather than being a civil engineering. Therefore people by doing different type of hobbies would know themselves better, promote their area of strengths and consequently have a happier life.
Secondly, according to researches people tend more to come up with new idea after a pause in working especially in complicated work situation. That is because our brain is more like an electronic circuit which means a pause or switching in activities in which it is involved make it refresh and boost its function. From my personal experience when I was passing my dissertation, I was faced with a complex problem so far as none of my results did not make any sense .At that point my advisor allowed me to take a break and I tried to deviate my brain from any normal procedure I got before to reach the results; so I went to my grandma’s house which is near woods in north of Iran. After that pause with a fresh mind, I could detangle from the dilemma and got a high score in my master project.
To make a long story short, I am strongly agree with doing hobbies and activities totally different from what people do at their work in order to increase self-awareness, improve productivity and brain function.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 114, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: Much may; A good deal of may
...oward the way of spending leisure time. Many may have the conviction that any activities...
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Line 1, column 308, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...d in activities which are far different than those of they regularly do at work woul...
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Line 3, column 265, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'helps'?
Suggestion: helps
...ir horizon, named but a few but it also help them discover other aspects of their pe...
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Line 3, column 1100, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... rather than being a civil engineering. Therefore people by doing different type of hobbi...
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Line 5, column 24, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...happier life. Secondly, according to researches people tend more to come up with new id...
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Line 5, column 466, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...one of my results did not make any sense .At that point my advisor allowed me to t...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: At
...e of my results did not make any sense .At that point my advisor allowed me to tak...
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Line 7, column 43, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'agreed'.
Suggestion: agreed
... make a long story short, I am strongly agree with doing hobbies and activities total...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, may, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2289.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76875 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73421527311 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 729.9 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 20.1344086022 179% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 111.209062676 48.9658058833 227% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 176.076923077 100.406767564 175% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.9230769231 20.6045352989 179% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92307692308 5.45110844103 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318726046412 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105997590105 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.090738133723 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215949970068 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100158800166 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 11.7677419355 166% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.98 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.0537634409 163% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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