It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
In today's world, thanks to the advent of communication technology and media, people are able to know about all the events happening all around the world. In this regard, many believe that it is not necessary to know about everything in the world, since many of them are out of their business, and they cannot do anything about them. However, others believe that it is advantageous to listen and read about news around the world. I am unanimous with the latter group for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, knowing about what is happening around the globe, makes the world a better place to live. Some events especially the ones which influence people’s lives on a larger scale required to be widespread to save humans’ lives on the earth. In other word, these kinds of news cause some profound changes in governments policies, and could not be neglected since an enormous number of people are aware of them. These news usually involve events such as wars, environmental issues, and discrimination against minority and weak communities in societies, to name but a few. Taken, for example, environmental issues which has become a major concern through broadcasts. As a result, people and nations as well are now aware of the importance of natural environments, and the consequences of human activities on it. Thus, today, we are witnessing strict restrictions that governments impose on manufacturers for discharging pollutants into natural environments. In addition, people treat their home, earth, better than before by using public transportation and other green actions. Hence, being aware of some events all around the world make us do something to prevent human disasters.
Secondly, being exposed to news around the globe, widens people’s horizon, improving their lifestyles, and consequently the whole country, since each country comprises individuals. Knowing news not only makes people informed about events in other nations but it also unconsciously alters their lifestyle in positive ways, since it provides an opportunity for people to compare their weaknesses and strengths with people in other countries. For instance, once I was listening to foreign news, I was impressed by the way people in Germany protest against an unfairly and sudden increase in the cost of dairies. They do not take any physical action, but instead they peacefully abstain to buy diaries, which posed adverse consequences on economic as well as social status of diary companies. They insist on their position till the government had to mediate, and met their demands. Hence, exposure to news around the world will expand people’s horizon, and consequently the quality of their lives.
In conclusion, according to what I mentioned above, it is far better to expose to news from all around the world because not only it prevent from some human disaster and lead to some reforming in the world as whole, but it also can assist in expanding people’s horizon, improving the quality of people’s lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 428, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this news' or 'These newses'?
Suggestion: This news; These newses
...ous number of people are aware of them. These news usually involve events such as wars, en...
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Line 7, column 134, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'prevents'?
Suggestion: prevents
...ll around the world because not only it prevent from some human disaster and lead to so...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, by the way, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 87.0 52.1666666667 167% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2575.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 493.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22312373225 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88005883984 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519269776876 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 797.4 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.978656647 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.75 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.65 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.65 5.45110844103 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199046122582 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685544199539 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716979088756 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139032131048 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0831967670386 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 86.8835125448 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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