Do you agree or disagree? All children should be included in a team sport.

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Do you agree or disagree? All children should be included in a team sport.

Submitted by Happy_me on Sat, 05/26/2018 - 01:10

I strongly agree with the statement that all children should be included in a team sport. The contemporary world is filled with modernization and the technological advancement is rarely providing the kids any opportunity to play outside. Moreover, it is necessary for all children to play in a team for developing healthy body and sound mind. I believe, my propensity can be better understood by the conscientious observation of the modern lifestyle.

First of all, sports team are responsible for the orientation of the development of mind and body. As children are in a phase of steady growth and development and many kids hesitate to participate in team sports. So it is very important to clarify them about the benefits of having a strong physical and mental health to handle the stress of the current world, which is possible by the involvement in sports. While playing in a team, usually they tend to apply their mental skill to win, hence it helps them to employ their body parts effectively to achieve the goal for their team. Consequently, the team spirit brings out their social development to indulge in productive activities those are possible by working as a group. Furthermore, thse gradual development plays a indispensable role in their adult life to manage the extreme level of stress caused from the work place or urban society.

Secondly, in the present world of advance technology children are becoming inclined more and more to play video games or else spending maximum time in front of the television set or computer. As a result, it leads to obesity and many major health issues those are associated with it. Therefore, if they are encouraged to be included in to team sports, it can be helpful to eliminate obesity worldwide. In addition, video games and other digital activities cause addiction and adverse impact on the mental abilities. Whereas, playing as a team makes the children capable of making appropriate dicision in their life. The power of dicision making further helps them to be succeful adults along with proper physical and mental integration.

By the way of conclusion, I would mention that involvement of all children in team sports is not only fruitful for themselves but also for the man kind as a whole in every aspect. There is a famous saying "healthy children, healthy nation". Hence, the vibrant future of any nation depends upon its kids with the all round development of phycical and mental health.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
I strongly agree with the statement that...
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Line 4, column 772, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...hermore, thse gradual development plays a indispensable role in their adult life ...
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Line 6, column 517, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...adverse impact on the mental abilities. Whereas, playing as a team makes the children c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, while, in addition, as a result, by the way, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2062.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02926829268 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87630786536 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539024390244 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1724095589 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.526315789 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5789473684 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.68421052632 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261542728894 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0903203549448 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128210227508 0.0737576698707 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171969954051 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795077334805 0.0645574589148 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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