"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author is making flawed assumptions and is jumping into the conclusions. Without corroborating the positions of statements made the conclusions are made which cannot be accepted.
To begin with, on the first statement, the author is stating that mopeds serve as the popular transport and immediately measures the population scale. Here which population scale is measured, is it the number of people who are using the mopeds or the number of mopeds, increased is not known. There is no relationship between the popularity and the scaling the population unless said which population is measured. The author may have to reconsider his statement with some bolstering points and then render the conclusion.
Secondly, it is stated that number of rentals has to be limited from 50 to 25. Although this seems to have a good intention, in the end the conclusion which is made seem to make the whole statement naugatory. No evidence is provided that the only during the summer season, the accidents are augmenting and hence there is a need to reduce only during summer season. whether the popularity of these mopeds increases season wise, that also is not known. Without knowing these facts, the statement that is made to reduce the number of rentals during summer season cannot be approbated.
Thirdly, the author is making the comparision with the neighboring island. The comparision is about the effect of reducing the number of rentals on mopeds. Proper proponents are not provided on how the comparision is made. It may be likely that the island Seaville is a smaller island and hence there came a need to reduce the rentals to mitigate the number of accidents caused due to the mopeds. Without considering these points, the conclusion cannot be drawn that the enforcement of smae sort of rule in Balmaer island would help in the reduction of the accidents caused by mopeds.
Thus in total, there are many loop holes that needs to be addressed. Without addressing the gaps, measuring the scale, comparisoions and other conclusions becomes senseless. Still deeper study has to be made and posited with bolstering points to strengthen the statement of assertion.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Although this seems to have a good intention, in the end the conclusion which is made seem to make the whole statement naugatory.
Error: naugatory Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Without knowing these facts, the statement that is made to reduce the number of rentals during summer season cannot be approbated.
Error: approbated Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Thirdly, the author is making the comparision with the neighboring island.
Error: comparision Suggestion: comparison
Sentence: The comparision is about the effect of reducing the number of rentals on mopeds.
Error: comparision Suggestion: comparison
Sentence: Proper proponents are not provided on how the comparision is made.
Error: comparision Suggestion: comparison
Sentence: Without considering these points, the conclusion cannot be drawn that the enforcement of smae sort of rule in Balmaer island would help in the reduction of the accidents caused by mopeds.
Error: smae Suggestion: same
Sentence: Without addressing the gaps, measuring the scale, comparisoions and other conclusions becomes senseless.
Error: comparisoions Suggestion: comparisons
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- somehow similar to argument 1
argument 3 -- OK
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flaws:
more arguments wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 357 350
No. of Characters: 1767 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.347 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.95 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.685 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.201 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.313 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.563 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.06 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 255, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...idence is provided that the only during the summer season, the accidents are augmenting and hence...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 366, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Whether
...ed to reduce only during summer season. whether the popularity of these mopeds increase...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...n of the accidents caused by mopeds. Thus in total, there are many loop holes tha...
^^^^
Line 9, column 175, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
...nd other conclusions becomes senseless. Still deeper study has to be made and posited...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, thus, as to, sort of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 357.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09243697479 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75841962828 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470588235294 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.5370354198 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6842105263 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7894736842 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84210526316 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190544331144 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594463907202 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571493341156 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0901264296485 0.128457276422 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0737857649705 0.0628817314937 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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