Some people believe that Young people who commit serious crimes should
be punished in the same way as adults. Do you agree or disagree?
There is currently a contentious argument over whether youths who make heavy offence should be penalized in the same methods as adults. I totally disagree with this opinion because children often do not understand all results of their actions and youngsters behaviors can be easier and faster corrected by minor punishment than grow-ups.
The main reason why I support this statement is young people most of the time are hooked by emotions and do not analyze all negative aspects. Crime groups very often attract children to their communities because it is very simple to make brain-washing during this age. For example, many youngsters who made serios crimes just follow adults or make decision based on unreal stories.
Another reason why I believe children should not be punished as adults is because youngsters behaviors are very flexible and can be corrected without strong penalties. This is because they do not have a solid society vision and their brains are still under development process. For instance, role model is the key during this age therefore children in friendly environment can change their attitude from negative to positive very rapidly. Special schools with correction programs are one of the key factors to change children’s behaviors in an assertive way.
In conclusion, I completely disagree that children who engage in serious illegal acts should be punished as grown-ups. This is because young people are influenced then older generation; moreover, youngsters behaviors can be gently adjusted with appropriate treatment. Given this situation, it seems that people should be more accurate with a young generation and use other methods of penalizing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
moreover, so, still, then, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1423.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36981132075 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76462421089 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596226415094 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.4591175548 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 118.583333333 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0833333333 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177031638358 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671703808965 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399863652339 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113201281364 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424295292792 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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