TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

Based on the reading conditions on Venus are not appropriate to establish human living on it. The article provides three reasons to support it. However, the lecturer explains that none of the reasons are true and refutes each of the author's reasons.

The author argues that atmospheric pressure at Venus surface is so higher than the pressure on Earth, so humans whom might land on Venus will be crushed under this high pressure. In contrast, the lecturer demonstrates that pressure has a direct connection with height. By going to higher elevations on Venus, the pressure will be lower. So we can establish a balloon-like shape around the Venus about 50 kilometers upper of the Venus surface. In this elevation atmospheric pressure is adequate to human. As a result, the contribution that the author explained seems to be really dubious.

Furthermore, the reading passage holds the view that there are not enough water and oxygen on Venus' surface and transferring these elements from Earth to Venus will not be a practical solution. Nevertheless, the lecturer illustrates that Venus' surface contains a high amount of carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid and these elements can change to water and oxygen by chemical processes. Therefore, the low amount of water and oxygen supplies would not be a considerable problem.

Finally, the reading asserts that the sunlight on the Venus surface is to low to make electricity. The lecturer opposes this point by proposing a solution. She claims that above the 50 kilometers the sunlight is proper to make electricity. Moreover, she suggests using reflected sunlight by clouds to produce more electricity. Consequently, this claim does not possess a strong support in order to be acceptable.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 72, Rule ID: TO_TOO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...at the sunlight on the Venus surface is to low to make electricity. The lecturer o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, furthermore, however, moreover, nevertheless, so, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1241.0 1373.03311258 90% => OK
No of words: 238.0 270.72406181 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21428571429 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78293713046 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 145.348785872 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 391.5 419.366225166 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.601053242 49.2860985944 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6428571429 110.228320801 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 21.698381199 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06452816374 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352063338692 0.272083759551 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110729108575 0.0996497079465 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900837298827 0.0662205650399 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18309055307 0.162205337803 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105482627554 0.0443174109184 238% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.3589403974 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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