Tpo51- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's world, human beings have been affected positively and negatively by movies and television. With this in mind, a heated controversy exists over whether movies and television have a negative effect on youth or not. I, personally, am of the opinion that movies and television bring about negative effects on youths' behavior. I have some reasons for my idea, two of which are being aggressive and imitate the negative action of actors or actress. This reason will be substantiated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, watching movies and television lead to aggression. Young people who watch movie and television are capable of being aggressive because some scene of movies and also some news is nothing but showing aggression. Nowadays, all movies and television have been replete with inappropriate scenes that highly negatively affect young people's behavior. The more people see inappropriate movies, the more they are capable of being aggressive. Take my experience as an illustrative example. When I was an 18-year-old person, I used to watch quite a few movies and television programmes. I had taken 4 hours per a day before I was aware of the bad consequence of this behavior. Therefore, this behavior made me an aggressive person who could not socialize with other people. Moreover, even though I studied very well, I could not succeed in my study because I had not the ability to have a proficient connection with my classmates and my teachers.
The other reason worth mentioning is that by watching movies young people can learn some negative behavior from actors and actress. In other words, behavior showing in the movies and television may have a negative effect on youth that they forget the proper traits. Furthermore, they might learn the behaviors that are not proper for their ages, characteristics and social levels. Should parents want to control their children, they must prevent their children from watching movies. That the profound impact of movies on young people is irreversible is undeniable. the real example of these facts is my nephew. She was a polite person and her behaviors were so appropriate that everyone admitted her. Since she was 12 years old, she was surrounded by lots of movies. Two years later, her behaviors were changed totally. She became an impolite person who could not respect anyone. After a while, her parents found that these false behaviors were the result of watching movies.
All in all, by taking all the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, one can conclude that watching movies and television might change the behaviors of young people, for not only the young people become an aggressive person, but also they learn negative behavior from movies. I highly recommend that young people should be prohibited from watching movies and television.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 316, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youths'' or 'youth's'?
Suggestion: youths'; youth's
...evision bring about negative effects on youths behavior. I have some reasons for my id...
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Line 5, column 566, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...g people is irreversible is undeniable. the real example of these facts is my nephe...
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Line 7, column 257, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to negative'
Suggestion: to negative
... aggressive person, but also they learn negative behavior from movies. I highly recommen...
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Line 7, column 257, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to negative'.
Suggestion: to negative
... aggressive person, but also they learn negative behavior from movies. I highly recommen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2376.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15401301518 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74492196265 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477223427332 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 743.4 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.8029505894 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0740740741 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55555555556 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236497230619 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733086178272 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658076912752 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166753584855 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543110210983 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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