Recent incursions by deep-sea fishermen into the habitat of the Madagascan shrimp have led to a significant reduction in the species population. With the breeding season fast approaching, the number of shrimp should soon begin to increase. Nonetheless, the population should not return to the levels before the fishing boats arrived. Because this trend is expected to continue over the next several years, the Madagascan shrimp will quickly become an endangered species.
The above argument poses many unanswered questions. There is not much evidence that the Madagascan Shrimp is reducing except the one given by deep-sea fishermen.
First of all, the argument says that the incursions of deep-sea fishermen have concluded the declining of the Madagascan shrimp. However, this may be false. Because, the region where deep-sea divers have investigated may be the natural habitat of the species, but, due to some climatic changes or because of dangerous predators, the species might have relocated to a different region or different part of the sea. Climatic changes in the sea will play a major part in the lives of water species. They will have a intiution about the upcoming climatic changes. So this might be the reason for relocation of species.
In addition to that, the species might have developed some attribute like being invisible from deep-sea divers(just an example) over the course of years to overcome the fishermen. The argument doesn't provide any evidence of that. To avoid fishermen, these species might be breeding in a different locations or in the different parts of the sea and thus saving their future.
As per the law of the nature's evolution, the thing which is declining now will give rise to new things in future to maintain the balance in the enviroment . So even if they are endangered, there might be a rise of new similar species over the course. The argument provides the only evidence of the fishermen, that the Madagascaran shrimp is declining. There should be a proper scientific research and analysis by the experts to conclude that the species are really endangered. The argument doesn't provide any number about the habitat of Madgascan shrimp. Without the actual numbers and analysis, in the current contemporary world, one can not conclude that the habitat of a species is endangered.
Thus the argument provides many unstated fallacies and assumptions. The endangering of species depends on many factors. One unanalysed survey by deep-sea fishermen is not sufficient to conclude that the habitat of Madagascan shrimp is getting endangered. So the argument falls apart.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: They will have a intiution about the upcoming climatic changes.
Error: intiution Suggestion: intuition
Sentence: In addition to that, the species might have developed some attribute like being invisible from deep-sea diversjust an example over the course of years to overcome the fishermen.
Error: diversjust Suggestion: divers just
Sentence: As per the law of the nature's evolution, the thing which is declining now will give rise to new things in future to maintain the balance in the enviroment .
Error: enviroment Suggestion: environment
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here goes a sample:
https://www.testbig.com/gmatgre-argument-task-essays/recent-incursions-…
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 350 350
No. of Characters: 1748 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.325 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.994 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.668 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.083 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.476 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.32 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.506 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.061 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 512, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... lives of water species. They will have a intiution about the upcoming climatic c...
^
Line 5, column 192, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...to overcome the fishermen. The argument doesnt provide any evidence of that. To avoid ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 296, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'location'?
Suggestion: location
...pecies might be breeding in a different locations or in the different parts of the sea an...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 23, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'natures'' or 'nature's'?
Suggestion: natures'; nature's
... their future. As per the law of the natures evolution, the thing which is declining...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 155, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...o maintain the balance in the enviroment . So even if they are endangered, there m...
^^
Line 7, column 491, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ies are really endangered. The argument doesnt provide any number about the habitat of...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... habitat of a species is endangered. Thus the argument provides many unstated fal...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, really, so, thus, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1797.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 348.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16379310345 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75259009724 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48275862069 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.751883141 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5714285714 119.503703932 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5714285714 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47619047619 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240342692233 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733371494728 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0782461268728 0.0701772020484 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145650884887 0.128457276422 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0142676725496 0.0628817314937 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.