In many countries , children are becoming overweight and unhealthy . Some people think that the government should have the responsible . To what extent do you agree or disagree ?
It is a popular belief that the authority should be responsible for an increasing number of obese children . While I concede that the government has a duty to address this problem , I believe that children’s parents play a better role in obesity epedemic.
Firstly , it is parents that are required to chose an appropriate diet for the children . Specifically , an appropriate diet would have an adequacy in nutrients. Infact , parents’ choice is really vital. Given that their children suffer from obesity, they should not prefer a diet that contains too much protein as well as cholesterol . Then , parents’ caring in the diet of children exerts a essential impact on their health . Without such supervision , there is an increasing number of obese children .
Secondly, it is parental supervision in lifestyle that is also able to restrict the obesity of children . Particularly, the obesity results from the lazy movement of children . In fact , a significant number of children become obese due to sedentary lifestyle as well as their too much watching TV . Therefore, parents should lead their children to a healthy lifestyle and encourage them to participate in recreational activities. This promote them to become energetic and dynamic .
In conclusion , I confirm my standpoint as a protester againts the topic . Although the cabinet is required to offer methods to curb the obesity of the children , no matter how small their impacts are . I completely suppose that it is parents that are blame and take the responsibility for their chidren’s unhealthy condition.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, in fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1328.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 249.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33333333333 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16992926008 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542168674699 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 418.5 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.647122112 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5625 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.01903807615 418% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131830585565 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0477525056294 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0262052273971 0.0667982634062 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0876996346114 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0207517505471 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.