TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends

It is always sound nice to say I have a lot of friends. Everybody likes to have a very active social life. Therefore, I do not agree with the statement, I believe that to be happy it is more important to have a lot of friends.

To begin with, when you are able to make new friends, you never get bored and you do not have to stay isolated at home when you always have a friend keen to spend time with you. I work very hard during the week, and on the weekends I like to go out for a drink or a movie. Image if I had just a few friends and they all are busy the night you want to go out, you should change your plans and stay home watching TV all alone, but if you have many friends you always will find someone who enjoys going to the cinema or a pub with you. Furthermore, if you are an easy going person and make new friends it is not a problem, you can always go to any party by yourself and make new friends when you there.

Also, have many friends can be very emotional in some situations, last week was my birthday and one of my closest friends has organized a birthday party, she gathered all my friends at her house. she gathered all my friends, even the old ones from high school. when I arrived at her place and I entered the dining room, they were all there for me, and they were a lot. It has been a very emotional moment that I cried with joy. I do not think if there were only a few friends, it would have been the same emotion. This experience made me think that I am a very lucky person to have such many friends who love me.

In conclusion, I believe the more the friends more the happiness.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 459, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[10]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'will' and 'find'.
Suggestion: will always find
...alone, but if you have many friends you always will find someone who enjoys going to the cinema ...
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Line 5, column 197, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...e gathered all my friends at her house. she gathered all my friends, even the old o...
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Line 5, column 262, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
...ds, even the old ones from high school. when I arrived at her place and I entered th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1299.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 323.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.02167182663 4.8611393121 83% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.11638837904 2.67179642975 79% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498452012384 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 416.7 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.6175700265 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7857142857 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0714285714 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07142857143 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210749429633 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746463887103 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737873797203 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125889944243 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481936545476 0.0645574589148 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.33 10.9000537634 58% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.24 8.01818996416 78% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 86.8835125448 35% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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