To be successful at work or at school, we must be creative.
Without doubt that creativity is important to success and the creative people are succeed, however I don’t believe that creativity is the only or the most important way to success, certainly there are more important factors that contribute in success at school or at work such as patience, persistency, self-confidence , commitment , honesty and hard working To begin with, without being passionate with what you do or what you want to achieve, you wouldn’t be able to create then to success, if we considered that the creativity is the only way to success. Take my friend Mira as example, who is graduated from an art school, she is obsessed with what she does. The sculpture is an art which requires the creativity, but she told me once upon a time that creativity without patience, persistency and hardworking will not work out and form what she is now. Now she is one of the most important local artists in my country Egypt. Furthermore, that there are many factors affect the way of success more than creativity like patience ,persistency, hardworking, self-confidence, commitment and honesty. For instance my friend Amant last year she was pregnant and her pregnancy was difficult and she had to pass an important and a hard exam for her major to be a certified pharmacist in the USA, although her struggling with the hardness of the exam and difficulty of her pregnancy, she passed the exam and succeeded. During the course of our talking, without all the previous factors which I mentioned them, she would not succeed in her hard exam. All in all, based on those above mentioned factors I believe that the creativity is not the only way to success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, then, for instance, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1391.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 284.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89788732394 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92067732001 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531690140845 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 20.6003584229 29% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 47.0 20.1344086022 233% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 148.704871773 48.9658058833 304% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 231.833333333 100.406767564 231% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 47.3333333333 20.6045352989 230% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.1666666667 5.45110844103 223% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.53405017921 22% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178918881111 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0726126328528 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0986970711657 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178918881111 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.3 11.7677419355 215% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 32.23 58.1214874552 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.4 10.1575268817 201% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.03 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 10.002688172 285% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 20.8 10.0537634409 207% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 21.0 10.247311828 205% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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