The increase of average human life span is evident by the significant numbers of geriatrics living aroung the world. Several sectors find that this phenomenon has brought tremendous consequences to our livelihood, while there are also some who believe that they create a positive impact to our community such as in the areas of economy and governance. With this this, I beg to differ to the latter notion.
Admittedly, the aging population pose a number of benefits to the community in terms of experience and wisdom. It is a fact that because some of them have seen the wild unfold through wars and scientific breakthroughs, they can greatly share their experiences and knowledge about those matters. This can provide many advantages especially in governance. Furthermore, the elder people can be reliable sources of stories of the past which can solidify our history for future generations to look back to. Therefore, there are certain aspects where the elderly people can be of advantage.
Nevertheless, not every person has something to share about the past or has experienced leading troops for them to pass on to the next generation. On the contrary, most elderly people living in facilities have either dementia or certain type of chronic illness. These make them unable to contribute ti the community. Others may even be burdens to their next of kin or the government because of the expenses they cost. Likewise, the increase in life expectancy and the ever increasing birth rate both contribute to the proliferation of the population. This phenomenon has been an unceasing problem of the world as each individual demands so much from the government and from natural resources as well. Thus, the longer life span has not benefited the community well, but even causing negative impact. On top of that, ambulatory seniles' slower pace cause nuisance especially on busy streets. This does not only trigger annoyance but also risks of accidents in streets which further explains why lengthier life span does not help well with out modern community.
In my own view, the higher life expectancy that our aging population are enjoying right now seems to provide more drawbacks that benefits. As they are no longer productive members of society, they no longer impart in the economy. Aside for that, they threaten the daily grind of the younger professionals as they mingle in the streets. Most importantly, the large numer of aged population has contributed a significant number to the planet dwellers, consequenlty, the planet's destruction due to the unceasing consumption of our resources brought by the population plethora.
In summary, although living longer seems to be a fascinating experience because of the many stories and personal experiences elderly people may share to the young ones, it is by far more disadvantageous if we look at the bigger picture, especially in terms of personal and government economy, in road safety and especially to the world population.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: this
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Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
Suggestion: without
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'planets'' or 'planet's'?
Suggestion: planets'; planet's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, likewise, look, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, while, in summary, such as, on the contrary, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 41.998997996 167% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2498.0 1615.20841683 155% => OK
No of words: 484.0 315.596192385 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16115702479 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88213587329 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 176.041082164 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530991735537 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 793.8 506.74238477 157% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.4495832529 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.545454545 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77272727273 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157045487949 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0413599631224 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0272378053318 0.0667982634062 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0818322495825 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311154702643 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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