Nowadys, it is commonly accepted that the celebrities can mainly attrack and alinged young people especially tinageers than older people. Contrary to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that today we see that a lot of adults and even high experince people seriously following the celebrities like high school students follow them. I, to a great extent agree with this idea that the opiniops of celebrities are more important for young people.
First and foremost, young people present in the age that they want to find their main aims for their futur life. for example, when I was fourteen years old, every week I change my mind about my future field of study and my future job. Everthing that I saw in the television and I social networks affected on my decision. I searched alot between letters of famous scientists untill the articles from interviews with the celebrities to could find my interest. Because, the celebrities know as successful person inthe societies, and young people think that they are good template for guid them toward success.
On another significant fact that should be taken into th econsideration is that the young people have not very realestic view about world. Some of them maybe believe the roles of for example actors in the films. They think that this actors are very powerful and wonderful in the real world. Thus, the film superstarses are very favorite for them so they following evry news or their activities because they have this hope that through following them maybe they can recive to same ability with this actors.
Finally, yet importantly, the older people are very busy with their daily works and they should be responsible about a lot of things such as their familiy and children and their job. For instance, now, i ahve not enough time to visit my parent even in the weekends. Furthermore, people interests changed during time in the past a suddenly visiting with a celebrity in the street made I and my friend very exsiting and happy. But, now, I am just exsiting when I see my children are happy and culm.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I am convinced that the celebrities are more important for younger people than they are to older people. Because, some psychological issuse and several differentiation in people concepts and beliefs in different ages.
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- In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. 76
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- People learn things better from those at their own level- such as fellow students or co workers- than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors. 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, if, may, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, such as, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91939546599 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54837157149 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536523929471 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5532346335 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.5 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0555555556 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186945275804 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610555731647 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0664867234311 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119272192828 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0598595958502 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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