Although both ¬the reading and listening passage deal with the same topic: encyclopedias, their perspective are different. While the author of the reading passage believes that traditional printed encyclopedia is better than online encyclopedia, the lecturer casts doubt on the writer’s idea. He thinks that online encyclopedia has some impressive advantage.
The first point made in the reading passage is that contributors to the online encyclopedia lack credentials. The article noted that the contribution partially informed inaccurate information to the reader. Besides, the traditional encyclopedia’s contribution was written by trained experts who guaranteed a good outcome. However, the lecturer contradicts the writer’s idea and asserts that there were mistakes in the work of writer in traditional forms. Moreover, he argues the errors can last for a decade without being corrected. Still, the online encyclopedia errors can easily be corrected through the Internet.
Another point made in the reading passage is that unscrupulous or hacker have the chance to corrupt the work through the online encyclopedia. It is mentioned that user who cannot tell the entry has been tampered with the information that never happens in traditional encyclopedia. On the contrary, the author claims that company using online system are improved their security by employing some stragies. He puts forth his idea by mentioning the pusher system, which limits the change in format in news, prevents the hacker from doing their work. In addition, hiring special monitor to control the system is also a good way to increase security for online encyclopedia.
The last point mentioned in the reading is that online encyclopedia focus on many topics which creates a false impression of important news. The article mentioned the example of a student doing history homework. While the traditional forms provides significant information about historical events for the students, the online instead includes major historical ones that attracts more attentions as a long-running television program. On the other hand, the lecturer refutes the writer’s idea and claims that printed new has less space than online ones. Therefore, they limit their choice about writing topics. However, the online newspaper has diversity topics thanks to the wide space which is the most advantage to the online encyclopedia.
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- Rembrandt is the most famous of the seventeenth-century Dutch painters. However, there are doubts whether some paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually painted by him. One such painting is known as attributed to Rembrandt because of its style, and 80
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- integrated TOEFL writing 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 399, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...l ones that attracts more attentions as a long-running television program. On the other hand, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, while, in addition, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.65384615385 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03285753903 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535714285714 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 12.0 3.08781362007 389% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7444035587 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.9 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281495579065 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0892733291384 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611200426683 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184832518095 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0299879885883 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 58.1214874552 62% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.49 10.9000537634 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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