According to a recent report from our marketing
department, during the past year, fewer people attended
Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year.
And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie
reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually
increased during the past year. Clearly. the contents of
these reviews are not reaching enough of our
prospective viewers. Thus. the problem lies not with the
quality of our nioVies but With the public's lack of
awareness that movies of good quality are available.
Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share
of its budget next year to reaching the public through
advertising.
Given argument says that fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies during the past year when compared to any other years in the past. The memo of advertising director of Super Screen production company convey that lack of awarness among people about the quality of movies and the lack of awarness on reviews by the movie critics has led to the the decrease in people attending movies.
Argument makes many assumptions and lacks in providing evidence to such assumptions. Argument does not say anything about the which kind or genre of movies were produced during the past year. Whether these movies were of same kind or different when compared to movies from past. Even though movies were rated as good by critics it may not be good enough for the public.
Because movie critics tend to watch lot of movies and their expectation and publics expectation from a movie may differ.
Further the author concludes that problem lies not with quality of movies but with publics lack of awarness about quality movies. This does not support the statistics of fewer people attending movies produced by the company during last year because the number of movies produced in past years may be more or movies in past might have casted famous actors who were liked public. Recent movies might have casted actors who were not famous. Public response to a movie depends on lot of aspects like storyline, comedy, entertainment, a message in the movie, action, background music etc. The time during which a movie was released also impacts the number of viewers. For example an average movie released during holidays like christmas may have more number of people watching it than a good movie released during normal working days.
The author concludes that greater share of budget should be allocated in next year to reach the public by advertising. But this conclusion is based on lot of assumption made. Rather company should invest on finding out the likes and dislikes of public.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 332 350
No. of Characters: 1616 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.269 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.867 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.28 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.133 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.607 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.565 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.117 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 351, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...reviews by the movie critics has led to the the decrease in people attending movies. ...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 351, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...reviews by the movie critics has led to the the decrease in people attending movies. ...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e decrease in people attending movies. Argument makes many assumptions and lack...
^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s expectation from a movie may differ. Further the author concludes that proble...
^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e released during normal working days. The author concludes that greater share ...
^^^
Line 5, column 178, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...ion is based on lot of assumption made. Rather company should invest on finding out th...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1644.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 332.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95180722892 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33508149818 2.78398813304 84% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481927710843 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6689950502 57.8364921388 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.75 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.75 5.70786347227 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350191947639 0.218282227539 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1204154589 0.0743258471296 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112525096583 0.0701772020484 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199256592979 0.128457276422 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119607182935 0.0628817314937 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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