Some people believe that employment over the age of 60 is not right and creates lots of problems. So people should retire after 60 and not work. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Over the past decades, the advancement of medication that enhance the strength of the seniors has translated into late retirement in most affluent nations. Alongside this changing pattern in population, the latest sociological discoveries has casted light on the necessities for people to retire after 60 in order to sustain both individual physical condition and the provision of jobs. This essay will use the example from these academic work to assert that people who aged 60 should quit their jobs to enjoy the late life.
To begin with, retirement is intuitively perceived as a corollary of weakened physical constraint. What this means is that the constantly vigorous lifestyle in one’s adulthood, to a considerable extent, has emasculated one’s physical ability, whereas continuing such vibrant life probably aggravates their conditions. For instance, recent empirical research from the World Health Organisation ascertained that working after 60 often increases the potential for one to get chronic diseases entailing heart attack and joint pain in the subsequent decade. Consistent with this line of thinking, coupled with a enjoyable lifestyle, one is likely to gain his longevity after retirement.
Another pivotal component to remember, meanwhile, is the sustainable development of labour markets. This is because the job opportunities are invariably restricted in most business sectors, and retirement is somehow ensure the continuous promotion in a general career path. In fact, after being interviewed by the Labour Force Consulting Group, the majority of employers admitted that they often consider the promotion of an experienced staff upon the resignation of their managers. Seen in this light, the leave of the senior workforce broadly constitutes a chance for rewarding the juniors who gained sufficient sophistication, which then sustain the diversity in labour markets.
In conclusion, there is ample evidence suggesting that retirement is essential to both individual longevity and societal development. Given the strength of evidence, it is predicted that the government will enact any measures to coerce people who age 60 into retirement in the foreseeable future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'ensured'.
Suggestion: ensured
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, then, whereas, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.3376753507 264% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1878.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.69090909091 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05535703504 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624242424242 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.3904193333 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.461538462 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3846153846 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23076923077 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239574084922 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738704455288 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054829949036 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136873416779 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0627418398186 0.056905535591 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.02 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.67 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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