Nowadays everything is more precisely and cheap, computers are improving our lives in different ways and situations even though humans steel need to control, to fix and to creat they. I think this change is positive and helpful for humans and do not make decrease the disponibility of jobs for people. There are my reasons to support my vision.
First of all, medicine is evaluating a lot the use of robots to do some surgery, and it is more precisely and without risk to some wrong happen in the procedure. Although these robots are doing the action about the surgery, a doctor needs to control than and create the robots as well, actually, this creation involves a bug quantity of professionals for example, a computer programmer, an engineer, and of course a doctor. Two years ago I had a problem with my appendicitis and I did a surgery to solve this problem. The procurement was done by a robot called Da Vinci which is the most modern equipment for this situations. The doctor controls everything and there were a lot of people in the room, another doctor, one nurse, my sister, which was a medical student and one anesthetist. Even though a robot did my surgery, the same people continue involved in the procedure. In addition, my recuperation was very good because of Da Vinci is very precise and minimus evasive.
Additionally, computers and technology make our lives cheaper and easy helping us to not lost our jobs. The business environment is all the time needing more knowledge and time. Telecommunication changed the ways of teaching and learning. Nowadays is very normal for universities to offer online courses using a lot of technology, they use the must high tech computers and this helps us to study anywhere we are. But the system still needs the professors, the cameras guys, the programmer's computer. The difference will be that we won't need to go into the classroom to learn and the institution will spend less money because of they will decrease they utilities and the tuitions will decrease making this courses cheaper than the regular. The students avoid spending time on traffic because they are able to study anywhere. When I finished my graduation I started to work and the time was too short for me to study, and I wanted to do my post graduation. I chose to do this online because the time that I had was only at night, and the school created a software very user-friendly, the price was 40% less than the regular, the professor was the same and the books were all in pdf. I finished this spending less money, with the best professors and in my home. In fact, technology is making our lives much better.
In conclusion, this advanced of technology create robots, and super fast computer to help us and even though some of than do the humans works, they still need a person to control and to do maintenance.
- TOEFL integrated writing: communal online encyclopedia 80
- Dinosaurs 3
- TPO-08 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 71
- smart cars 63
- Print media, including Magazines and newspapers, will soon be completely replaced by internet news source. 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 610, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... which is the most modern equipment for this situations. The doctor controls everyth...
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Line 5, column 479, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'programmers'' or 'programmer's'?
Suggestion: programmers'; programmer's
...s the professors, the cameras guys, the programmers computer. The difference will be that w...
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Line 5, column 618, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_I[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'because they' instead.
Suggestion: because they
...d the institution will spend less money because of they will decrease they utilities and the tu...
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Line 5, column 1010, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...this online because the time that I had was only at night, and the school created a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, so, still, well, as to, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, of course, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2358.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7444668008 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72166992425 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490945674044 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 748.8 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 13.0 3.08781362007 421% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7232057838 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.181818182 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5909090909 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279838753874 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719739017753 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0689763953668 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175317375158 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0139401101799 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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