TPO-14 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Traveling to foreign country is very intersting and surprising. But this includes dealing with different problems and also cost more money than domestic traveling. In my opinion, traveling to foreign countries have some advantages that overcomes the disadvantages and I diagree with the statement. I have two main reason for this opinion that I will mention in the reminder of this essay.
First, Traveling to foreign countries can habe positive influence in our life style. We will engage to new style of living by traveling to foreign countries. We can either accept or reject this style or even we can adapt them to our previous style. In all different scenarios, our life style will enhance. For example, one of my friends has this experience. In my country, Iran, people waste lots of energy sources by over consuming. Over consuming of energy causes lots of problem for goverment to prepare needed energy. My friend traveled to Sweden and he did unterstand the current method of saving energy in house. Hence, he used these method in building his new house.
Second, Traveling to foreign countries will help us to learn new cultures and also contains valuable experiences. We will learn different cultures and also different adaptation methods to nature by experience it. I think that this valuable information will help us in our future life. For instance, I watched documentary in TV that was about living in South America. Specifically, living in Peru. Watching this documentary was really intersting for me. Because, I learned how people with different cultures can live together, however, they have different cultures and life style.
In conclusion, Traveling to foreign countries has some valuable advantages that people can't have by domestic traveling. This experiences include life style and culture and etc. However, there are some economical challenges. But I think that obtaining this valuable experience worths spending lots of money.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, really, second, so, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1643.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24920127796 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75949577494 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511182108626 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.0244276274 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.4583333333 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.0416666667 20.6045352989 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08333333333 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136348396601 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0452350802576 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588735968799 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0972877364724 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0466100339967 0.0645574589148 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.82 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.28 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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