TPO-33 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?When teachers assign projects on which students must work together, the students learn much more effectively than when they are asked to work alone on projects.

It is obvious that finding a secure job and having the satisfaction of it is one of the most important goals of humans in their lives. It is important for people to try to choose a job so that it ensures their future life. I strongly believe that nowadays it is more difficult for individuals to select a job which guarantees prosperous future. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss my view using some reasons and examples.

I think in today’s fast-paced world, with the development of technology and industry, it is very hard for people to identify a job which results in a bright and safe future because demands for various careers are changing very quickly. For example, some jobs were done with hands in the past and had high earnings, while presently they are carried out with machines. Also, most of people followed ancestral jobs and had an attitude towards it and were familiar with its future. As another example, in my country, almost thirty years ago, people who had university education could find a secure job with good income. As a result people easily are aware of the fact that in order to get an appropriate job, they must have academic degree. But unfortunately today technology is progressing and thus needs of society for various careers are changing; as a result, it cannot easilt forecast that what kind of job will have better future.

I believe that in the past because of the fact that most people follow their family profession, they had previous experience and know their job future well. Although some people knew that their job would not successful, they were forced to select and continue it because they did not have any other choice. Also, there were some jobs that had satisfactory and secure future and everyone chose those jobs were successful in those careers. For instance, in my country, in the past individuals who worked in business had high social class and were satisfied with their jobs, whereas, today economic conditions are changing fast; therefore, many of businesses are in danger of defeat. Accordingly, it is not easy to choose a secure job.

To sum up, today according to the fact that the needs of humans and societies are changing quickly and also we are witness to fluctuations in economic conditions, it is impossible for people to predict the future of a job.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 78, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: of
...ob and having the satisfaction of it is one of the most important goals of humans in t...
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Line 3, column 379, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...ey are carried out with machines. Also, most of people followed ancestral jobs and had an atti...
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Line 5, column 28, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...r future. I believe that in the past because of the fact that most people follow their family profess...
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Line 7, column 224, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... people to predict the future of a job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, if, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, while, for example, for instance, i think, kind of, as a result, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1938.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.845 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6227657158 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4825 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.6032881454 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.125 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.625 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.058547651325 0.236089414692 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0240836615876 0.076458572812 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0205438571635 0.0737576698707 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.034480682583 0.150856017488 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0217802228337 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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