In the memo to the director of the student housing at Buckingham College, the issue of building new dormitories has been raised. It has been argued that such action has to be executed to house the growing enrollment of students as the trends suggests, increasing average rent in the town, and also the prospect of luring more students into the college on the pretext of attractive new dormitories. Though the claim may sound convincing, the argument is based on questionable premises and assumptions, lacks evidence, and based on the details provided, we cannot accept the argument as valid.
The primary flaw in the argument is the lack of any compelling evidence. "Growing trends", "rent in town risen in past years" are the phrases closest to justification in the entire claim. Not only is it flimsy reasoning, but also the deficit of justifying proofs and numbers makes the argument's conclusion uncertain. Numbers regarding trends of growing enrollment should be mentioned. Furthermore, to sew a more dependable argument, how the number of students is going to double in the next 50 years has be reasoned: the study which deduced this, being mentioned. Also, the evidence of rising apartment rent in the town has no evidence. It might very well be the case that the writers's belief about these trends has little or nothing to do with reality. Thus, the lack of proper evidence renders the argument invalid.
In addition, the author makes several unreasoned assumptions to further diminish the veracity of the argument. Although, the enrollment at the college is growing, it does not necessarily imply that a larger student community is looking for dormitories. Perhaps, it might be a usual practice to stay in town apartments due to the convenience. Rising rents in the town, in no way entails that the dormitories are any cheaper. It might very well be costly to stay in the college dorms than finding shelter outside college campus. Hence, these unjustified premises have to be well articulated to provide a persuasive argument.
Finally, the argument fails to take heed of all the background details, and the implications of building new dormitories. The fund for the construction, land acquirement, economic status of the Buckingham college have to be taken into consideration as well. these details are not anwe
In sum, the illogical argument of the author lacks sound footing. To convince the reader, he must largely rephrase his argument, provide evidence to his claims, justify his assumptions, and provide explication between building new dormitories and the college's profitability. Without rectification, he is likely to persuade a few people.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not exactly
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 431 350
No. of Characters: 2170 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.556 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.035 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.801 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 136 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.591 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.585 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.297 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.499 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 306, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arguments'' or 'argument's'?
Suggestion: arguments'; argument's
...justifying proofs and numbers makes the arguments conclusion uncertain. Numbers regarding...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 525, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...oing to double in the next 50 years has be reasoned: the study which deduced this,...
^^
Line 7, column 259, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: These
...to be taken into consideration as well. these details are not anwe In sum, the il...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 285, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tion as well. these details are not anwe In sum, the illogical argument of the au...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 252, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'colleges'' or 'college's'?
Suggestion: colleges'; college's
...etween building new dormitories and the colleges profitability. Without rectification, h...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, regarding, so, thus, well, as to, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 16.3942115768 171% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2260.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 431.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24361948956 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9936598936 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519721577726 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.1912029181 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.727272727 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5909090909 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218035502882 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058737192797 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873142365088 0.0701772020484 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120855278663 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0847918738868 0.0628817314937 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 98.500998004 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.