Your child’s school has arranged a trip abroad for students. The principal of the school asked some parents to join the trip to help. Write to the school principle and say
– Why do you want to join the trip?
– How could you help during the trip?
– Ask some questions about the trip.
Dear sir,
My son Jacob Hill, who is in 1st grade mentioned to me yesterday that a travel trip to another country has been organized by the school for students in which their parents can also show interest to join with them. Without having a second thought, i compelled myself to write to you to consider myself to come along with the students on this trip.
I would like to explain that as this travel plan includes visiting different historical places of 'London', i am also quite anxious to watch the 'Roman architect' of constructing buildings along with some tourist places. Moreover, during this visit i would also get a chance to learn about ancient art and culture as there are many museums possess such kinds of objects from all over the world.
i would also like to acknowledge that i have volunteered several times in summer camps for children arranged in many parts of our country with 'Helps Welfare Society'. Hence, i acquire some relevant experience to arrange everything for children on such kind of events. I believe that, my presence on this tour could be very fruitful for all the students.
It would be great if you could answer some of my question regarding this abroad travel. Firstly, how long the tour will be and what kind of living arrangements are made for accommodating everyone? Secondly, i would like to learn about the expenses incurred for each person on this vacation so that i can arrange finances accordingly. Finally, the list of places planned to be visited and requirement of any special clothing suitable for the climate of the country. I hope it will not cause any inconvenience to you.
I will look forward for your prompt response.
Yours sincerely,
Stephen Hill
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, look, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 4.92783505155 244% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 39.0 32.9175257732 118% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 26.3917525773 182% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1425.0 937.175257732 152% => OK
No of words: 294.0 206.0 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84693877551 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 3.78020617076 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56338274425 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 127.690721649 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622448979592 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 290.88556701 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.121091047 44.8134815571 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.785714286 76.5299724578 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 16.8248392259 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92857142857 4.34317383033 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 2.54639175258 393% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201713783534 0.216113520407 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617965574266 0.0766984524023 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041493043686 0.0603063233224 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0975691617192 0.12726935374 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644618504665 0.0580467560999 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 8.37731958763 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 8.71597938144 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 41.2886597938 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 8.62886597938 203% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.