In the reading, the author suggests that the local television should restore the time rate of the weather and the national news to its previous level. The reason is the complaint come from the audience and the lose of support from local bussiness. However, the flaws and absence of the evidence makes the suggests less convincing.
Firstly, the author mentions the most complaits come from the viewer who has interest on the weather and local news. However, the total number of the complaint is unknown. If the total number is small, then those complaint can hardly represent the opinion of majority viewers. In this case, most viewers might feel good about this change and remain slient. Additionally, even if the number is large, the unclear rate of complaining reviewer can not be a determining factor to the evaluation of the change.
Secondly, the author fails to point out the relationship between the cancellation of the financial support and the increased time of national news. The local business might ceased the funding for other reasons. For instance, they find another television which is cheaper and could give a better return.
Finally, the author does not give the evidence to show that to restore the coverage of the weather and the national news to its former level would bring the audience and the patron back. The patron could have already found a better television to broadcast their advertisiment and the audience might find other information source of local news and the weather predition. To make things worst, this behavior might could cause the lose of current viewers.
To wrap it up, the manage does not provide more detailed information, making the suggestion less convincing. In order to strengthen this suggestion, more evident data on the number of complaints need to be shown, as important as the reason why the patron stopped funding and the evidence that the restoration could bring the supporter and the audience back.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The reason is the complaint come from the audience and the lose of support from local bussiness.
Error: bussiness Suggestion: business
Sentence: Firstly, the author mentions the most complaits come from the viewer who has interest on the weather and local news.
Error: complaits Suggestion: complains
Sentence: In this case, most viewers might feel good about this change and remain slient.
Error: slient Suggestion: silent
Sentence: The patron could have already found a better television to broadcast their advertisiment and the audience might find other information source of local news and the weather predition.
Error: advertisiment Suggestion: advertisement
Error: predition Suggestion: prediction
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argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not exactly
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 324 350
No. of Characters: 1595 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.243 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.923 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.471 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.685 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.336 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.577 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.06 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 208, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...he complaint come from the audience and the lose of support from local bussiness. Howeve...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 208, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this complaint' or 'those complaints'?
Suggestion: this complaint; those complaints
...own. If the total number is small, then those complaint can hardly represent the opinion of maj...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 425, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... worst, this behavior might could cause the lose of current viewers. To wrap it up, ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 16, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... of current viewers. To wrap it up, the manage does not provide more detailed informat...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.6327345309 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1643.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 324.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07098765432 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5596879424 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484567901235 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6858816018 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.6875 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209584437018 0.218282227539 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682004767826 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068681064064 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119493996698 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507721526221 0.0628817314937 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.