TPO 50 - do you disagree with the statement or agree? all the university students should require to take history courses no matter what their field is. use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

By and large, beyond doubt, it is established that knowing about the country or other important events in the past has so many benefits for us. But some, including I, think it strongly depends on the student to be interested in the history or not. Therefore, making the history a procrustean course, I believe will follow with lots of arguments. In the following, I will delve into some of the conspicuous reasons to substantiate my point of view on this issue.

The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that imposing convictions on people has always been followed by the consequences in contrast with what we expect. University is a level of education that students should be able to follow their interests enthusiastically rather than constrained to spend time and effort on fields that students don't have any desire to have information about. In addition, I want to include my own experience, in my country, we are compelled to take some courses about the history and some fields related to religion and so on. Due to the courses being imposed, I utterly hate them and have never been listening to the teachers. I can confidently say that near 90% of the students have conviction alike my idol.

The other subtle point to be mentioned is that not all of the students have foundings and scholarships, most of them pay heavy tuitions for the university and making their burden heavier with such courses that are no use for them neither looks fair nor convenient. Furthermore, the money university spends for gathering the amenities a class requires is a cost that is waste. By the amenities I mean human resources to schedule the class, a professor to teach the course and some resources to clean the class weekly for students. Although spending these resources for other projects in the university will simultaneously bring up and followed by feedbacks with more satisfaction, astounding and appreciation. For instance, building some yards or changing the old materials that are being used and alternating them with the better functional ones.

Last reason that worth some words here are that, sometimes when people are forced to implement unfavorable things scientific research claim that they show some insulting behaviors toward the people who had made the decision or the others they think are the reason for that misery. Hence, the university and the professors should be expecting some inappropriate and ungracious manners from students. Personally talking there always have been some students in our history classes that had issues with the teacher which was uncomfortable for both the teacher and the other students.

Due to the aforementioned ground, I object to the statement that students should be required to take history classes or ant other unnecessary ones. To put in briefly, contemplating from all the factors and the reasons I believe taking history courses should be an option for the ones that aspire to know about it not a force for all of the students.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: some
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...ubtle point to be mentioned is that not all of the students have foundings and scholarship...
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Suggestion: all the
...aspire to know about it not a force for all of the students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, so, therefore, thus, for instance, i mean, in addition, in brief, in contrast, by and large

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2489.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00804828974 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83623003626 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51106639839 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 767.7 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.3524967763 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.0 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1578947368 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47368421053 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198653632094 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645486459296 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442040111022 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120091593122 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500931609978 0.0645574589148 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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It is a great essay. It deserves 25 out of 30 I think.

but you have used a lot of 'pattern sentences' which decrease the credits, like:

But some, including I, think it strongly depends on the student to be interested in the history or not. ...

I believe will follow with lots of arguments. ...

In the following, I will delve into some of the conspicuous reasons to...

The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that... //you can simply use 'first'

The other subtle point to be mentioned is that //you can simply use 'second'

Due to the aforementioned ground, I object to the statement that ....//you can simply use 'third'

To put in briefly, contemplating from all the factors and the reasons I believe ....