The president and the administrative staff of Grove College argues that maintaining the century old tradition of all-female education is the way to go rather than admitting men. Stated that way, the argument fails to consider key factors on the basis of which it could be evaluated. To justify this argument, the author states that after conducting a survey among the students and the alumnae, they the president and the administrative staff have come to this conclusion. However, careful scrutiny of the the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for the argument.
Firstly, the author states it has been found from the survey results that 80 percent of the students of Grove College wanted the tradition of all-female education to continue. Thus, based on this survey, the author concludes that the students do not want their college to admit men into their programs. However, this is merely an assumption made without any solid ground. It may be the case that in the survey they were explicitly asked if wanted their college to maintain all the old-traditions or do they want something new? The answer to this question will be vastly different than an unambiguous question that will ask if they want the college to admit men into its programs. The author must provide more information about the nature of the survey and the questions asked in order to make this argument more convincing.
Furthermore, the author points out that more than hald of the alumnae of Grove College also suggested that the college continue to maintain the tradition. Solely based on this study, coming to the conclusion that admiting men to the college will make it lose the support of the alumnae is an overgeneralization. To illustrate further, the alumnae may have stated in the survey that they do not want anything to change with their college. Their answer to the survey may have been influence by their feelings of nostalgia more than their thought of goodwill for Grove College. Thus, this argument is weak and unsupported and does not demostrate any solid correlation between the alumnae's goodwill of their college and the decisions made my the college.
Finally, the author concludes that maintaing an all female college will improve morale among the students and the confidence among the alumnae. Even after agreeing with the argument that the students and the alumnae actually want Grove College to not admit men into its programs, still careful scrutiny of the conclusion raises some skeptical doubts. We do not know if taking such a decision will improve morale or not. On what study is this conclusion based on. It may be the case that the morale among the students have been low for quite some years despite of Grove College being an all-female college. Without the answers to these questions, the reader will be left with an impression that the author's claim is more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence.
In conclusion, the author's argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the author should provide more clear concrete evidence, probably by the way of a detailed survey among the students and the alumnae of Groove College.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Furthermore, the author points out that more than hald of the alumnae of Grove College also suggested that the college continue to maintain the tradition.
Error: hald Suggestion: hand
Sentence: Solely based on this study, coming to the conclusion that admiting men to the college will make it lose the support of the alumnae is an overgeneralization.
Error: overgeneralization Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: admiting Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Thus, this argument is weak and unsupported and does not demostrate any solid correlation between the alumnae's goodwill of their college and the decisions made my the college.
Error: demostrate Suggestion: demonstrate
Sentence: Finally, the author concludes that maintaing an all female college will improve morale among the students and the confidence among the alumnae.
Error: maintaing Suggestion: maintain
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 530 350
No. of Characters: 2608 1500
No. of Different Words: 207 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.798 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.921 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.569 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 193 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 147 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.043 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.727 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.696 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.524 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 502, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...onclusion. However, careful scrutiny of the the evidence reveals that it provides littl...
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Line 1, column 502, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...onclusion. However, careful scrutiny of the the evidence reveals that it provides littl...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 581, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
... this question will be vastly different than an unambiguous question that will ask i...
^^^^
Line 9, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...tantive evidence. In conclusion, the authors argument is unpersuasive as it stands. ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, thus, in conclusion, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 28.8173652695 177% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2662.0 2260.96107784 118% => OK
No of words: 530.0 441.139720559 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02264150943 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79809637944 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64217242354 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.409433962264 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 828.0 705.55239521 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2939126502 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.739130435 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0434782609 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95652173913 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189081751068 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645580556275 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778750812198 0.0701772020484 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115782190715 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545300477302 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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