Citizens are worth of a nation. They are building blocks of a country and in making any decision their welfare should be kept in mind and of utmost importance. This is a hot topic of debate among people from all walks of life whether big policy decisions should be made by government officers solely or general public should be involved or not. I believe that common people should be involved in making important decisions as they are the one which will get affected the most.
First and foremost, politicians and government officers are given authority and responsibility towards people of a nation. Politicians may decide to construct a flyover in order to solve the problem of traffic congestion in an area. But this flyover will be build by making several people homeless and jobless as the buildings will be demolished in the area of construction of the flyover. Maybe this problem can be solved by diverting the traffic to other area. Moreover, maybe the city reluctantly needs a school rather than a flyover which will be a very costly project. All these requirements can be stated by a general public representative to government. As a representative will be more aware about issues faced by common people. Member of general public can act as an effective link between government and general public.
Besides this, the political and government officers cannot discuss all problems with public. As there are certain issues which needs privacy and other's can cause panic among people. For example, situations such as war or emergencies cannot be discussed in public. These decisions are made by government and public have to keep faith on their decisions. As they are the one who are supposed to work for the welfare of the people. However, wherever it is possible, government should discuss with general public regarding policies.
To conclude, I would like to reiterate my point that it is better to have transparency between government and common public. Both of them cannot work alone. They are two sides of a coin.So, working together will bring progress and development of a nation.
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- The effectiveness of a country's leaders is best measured by examining the well-being of that country's citizens.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ny decision their welfare should be kept in mind and of utmost importance. This i...
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...l these requirements can be stated by a general public representative to government. As a repr...
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...al public representative to government. As a representative will be more aware abo...
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...ssues faced by common people. Member of general public can act as an effective link between go...
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...n effective link between government and general public. Besides this, the political and gov...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1754.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 350.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01142857143 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75152796142 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9657428722 60.3974514979 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.5238095238 118.986275619 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6666666667 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274950651101 0.243740707755 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784144031652 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581797024186 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157043496942 0.150359130593 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439173986679 0.0667264976115 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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