Imagine that there is a large piece of vacant land in your town. What is the best way to make use of it? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Although some people might think to build hotel or recreation area to enhance privileges, but I would like to
construct tuition classes on the land in my town to enhance children's' performance.
Piece of land can strengthen base of child a the early age
best way to construct education center to overcome academic weakness
These days psychological problems dyslexia, attention deficit disorders and anxiety
are not uncommon. To address those issue there is stringent need to implement highly equipped
center with advanced facility and scholars. This settle will enable camaraderie for
the learning students by regularly interacting with teachers. It is undeniable truth that
professors are top notch scholars with abundant knowledge about subjects and ability to connect
well with different student's mindset. For instance, one of my friend's kid was suffering from dyslexia
but no one noticed until he scored low grades in English exam consistently. Worried parents heard about
Kummon in their area and admitted child there. Surprisingly, with the support and strategies to enhance learning
and reading he cleared all his English exams with flying colors just with in one year of coaching classes.
Another reason that deserves attention is piece of land can aid in offering sound education makes someone better parents.
It is well know fact that young uneducated single parents are overwhelmed with financial crisis other mental disorders,
so they are least interested in shaping child's future. In contrast, educated parents work strenuously to instill good values
and to notice kid's deficiency that insulates their progression. If child's education is jeopardized then vicious cycle will continue that is uneducated child when become parent might fail to think wisely for own kids. As a result, literacy level as a whole might plummet and poverty might skyrocket in near future. In addition, some country schools barely pay attention to all the student's needs due to
more students in class that is way just sending children to school might not eradicate society problem in general. Thus, educating adoslecents in wide variety of ways ensures beneficial upbringing of future progeny and eventually entire nation.
To sum up, to open up educational classes brought concrete benefits such as enriching weak students brain and educating future parents in wide variety of
ways. As a result, effective use of land is to provide opportunity to the rising children to shine.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, still, then, thus, well, for instance, in addition, in contrast, in general, such as, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2118.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44473007712 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70969936375 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.642673521851 0.524837075471 122% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5381593853 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.588235294 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8823529412 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 20.0 4.53405017921 441% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0820520469611 0.236089414692 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0262112684557 0.076458572812 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413932271589 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0272875658058 0.150856017488 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414223287239 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.