In many parts of the world, children’s lives were very different from today. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of life for children in the past?
In the past, some parents believed that all parents in the world had the same way of teaching their children about daily activities. While there were many advantages for children, some people should consider that there more disadvantages of living a life in the past.
There were a number of benefits of children’s ways of life in the past. Firstly, parents believed that children did not need any technology devices, for example: a television, a computer or a mobile phone because they would not have any time to spend their quality time to play outside with other friends who lived nearby. Secondly, parents could control their children directly, when family was in a living room together without any disturbing from children’s gadget.
However, in my view, there are more advantages that parents should see of using technology devices on children’s living nowadays. The most influence that parent can get is, when children use their own gadget, they will feel not being under pressure to be stressful at school because a gadget can help a student to look for sources of knowledge or games, and children will enjoy doing inside activity than going outside such a climbing tree or swimming in rivers. The popular way of children’s lifestyle recently has influenced by parents’ abilities. In recently years, parents have good financial to take children by car, but parents cannot look after family member at home, so their duties have replaced by a babysitter.
All in all, I believe the disadvantages of children way of living in the past were greater than the advantages. Children had more outside experiences, but children were not always able to benefit from it because they had less ability of using modern technology that support their education over their own lives both at home and school.
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Sentence: While there were many advantages for children, some people should consider that there more disadvantages of living a life in the past.
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Sentence: In recently years, parents have good financial to take children by car, but parents cannot look after family member at home, so their duties have replaced by a babysitter.
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Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace recently with adjective
Sentence: All in all, I believe the disadvantages of children way of living in the past were greater than the advantages.
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Suggestion: Refer to children and way
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Need to talk 'the advantages and disadvantages of life for children in the past' not for children now.
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