Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that young people have more freedom to involve in the process of decision making for society than young people had this opportunity in the past. Contrary to this popular belief there are still those who argue that the governments mainly preferred to keep young people away from engaging in making important decisions for society. However, I, to a great extent disagree with this idea that young people today have no influence on important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
First and foremost, today through the process of voting all people in society have this allow to have an influence on the important decisions for their own country. In the past all of the important decisions determined directly by kings or coins and some of the tightly related persons. However, today, most countries are governed by people that exactly chosen by people. Even after the revolution, societies did not give very impact to believes and ideas of young people because they looked at young people as a low experienced person with less knowledge about the political and social situation. Because in the past the value of people determined based on their age and gender, thus young people, women and little races had not this allow to involve in decision making for society.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that today a lot of political and social communities establish and regulated by young people. It is surprising if find a university that has not an active political and social communities. In these communities, students come together and discussed today important news and events and universities known as very important criticiser toward false decisions that may be taken by government
or parliament.
Finally, yet importantly, all of the governments realized that the productivity and development of each society highly dependent to their individuals knowledge about political and social situation, because increase in people awareness continuously push society forward through increasing the political stability, increasing people abilities to protect themselves and others toward social threatened and development of country. Therefore, in contrast to past today government encourage young people to engage in decision making and ordered schools and universities to teach and prepare students for this aim.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I am convinced that today young people have more influence on important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Because the entirety of all of the people in future of the country by participating in voting and because today's government encourage and supported the political and social activity of young people in different communities like the university.
- Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? 70
- If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying 66
- Tpo 49 73
- If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying 76
- It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: involving
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, look, may, so, still, therefore, thus, in contrast, in contrast to, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2393.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38963963964 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81471615246 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463963963964 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 765.9 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.5560361217 48.9658058833 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.533333333 100.406767564 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6 20.6045352989 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.532595546681 0.236089414692 226% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.211633696539 0.076458572812 277% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.185813734544 0.0737576698707 252% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.335524915704 0.150856017488 222% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.170084885058 0.0645574589148 263% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 11.7677419355 160% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 58.1214874552 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.247311828 185% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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