The game industry is growing perpetually and it is getting better progressively. The main target of this industry is children because they are easily persuaded to buy new games and they have time to play that, in opposite to adults. Also, Preponderance of games is made for children. Some agree that playing computer games is a waste of time for children, others disagree. Even though the children will get low degrees on their courses, because they appoint a time to play games more than studying for exams, in my view, playing computer games by children is important because of two important reasons.
First, playing computer games will enhance children's creativity. Some computer games have levels that contain puzzles and if the child wants to progress into the game, he has to solve them first. Therefore, It will help the brain to exercise spontaneously. For example, last year there was a mobile game which later converted to a computer game, called 1234. In this game, the players compete for each other to reach the number 1234 by finding hidden cards in the virtual space of the game's universe. It requires a lot of thinking and speed in processing the data to succeed and win the game. because the game became so popular, I remember there was an experiment in an elementary school in California, which it divided students into two groups. Students in one group play this game for a specific period, and the other group did not play it in the period. When the results of the experiment came out, it showed that the first group had better grades in mathematics final exam than the other group. This example showed me how playing computer games has a direct effect on children's creativity and power of thinking.
Second, when the children move into the adulthood, they will not regret that they did not play games in their adolescence, and instead of doing what other children do, they studied their books and did school stuff. To be honest, this is my personal reason. My father is a professor at the University of Sharif in Tehran. He had always compared me to his students, even when I was a child. Therefore, he compelled me and my brother to study our books and do our homework. He hated computer games, in his opinion, by playing video games you just wasting your time. Hence, I and my brother spent our time to study, and do not waste our free time playing games. Today, my brother is a code developer and game designer, which it is obvious that it comes from prohibiting playing games in childhood. Also, I regret that I did not play any games until now, and nowadays I don't have time for that because I had a family and an arduous job to manage!
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 486, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'games'' or 'game's'?
Suggestion: games'; game's
...idden cards in the virtual space of the games universe. It requires a lot of thinking...
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Line 3, column 594, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...g the data to succeed and win the game. because the game became so popular, I remember ...
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Line 5, column 866, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...lay any games until now, and nowadays I dont have time for that because I had a fami...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, as to, for example, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2198.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 471.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46899992314 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484076433121 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 681.3 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0339527186 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5833333333 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.20833333333 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301624992807 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0978681849608 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0806720543876 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219174614225 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0253725792042 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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