Since the dawn of civilization, the numbers of areas which people are participating them are increasing every day. There are various kinds of choices which governments should make to which they spend more money on. There is a drastic contrast between different people on whether the government should consider financial aids more to support the arts or athletics. While it is contradicted by many that it is more efficient to support sports teams and athletics more, I incline to believe that devoting more money to support the sports would be more effective. I will state some strong reasons to support my claim.
In my opinion, the first and most crucial reason is that sports and physical activities are utterly related to people's physical health. Nowadays a growing segment of people is suffering enormous physical disabilities. In the majority of cases, these disabilities are related to their motions problems. As a tangible example, a scientific research undertaken by sports practitioner at the University of Toronto has asserted that the disabilities' healing improvement is positively related to how the sport's equipments has improved. So, it can be inferred that doing regular physical tasks would help people to overcome their diseases. Hence, spending money on sports and athletic teams will help society health.
Furthermore, another reason which has to be considered is that all around the world people have indicated more enthusiasm for sports and physical activities. Children also find the sports more interesting than any other activities since their childhood. To illustrate more when I was teaching in a school, my little students were always exhausted and tired during art classes, however, students’ energy was superb during soccer classes. People interest in sports is due to thrilling and encouraging characteristics of sports. Sport is a strong factor which holds people from distinct nations near each other and let them excrete their real feelings in the best way. These sport's parameters have made it valuable around the world. So, spending money on sports would help people have better lives too.
Drawing upon the reasons -- increasing people's health-- and -- being valuable all around the world-- although there are always some exceptions which are excluded from the general rule, I am to a large extent on the belief that spending more money on sports will induce to some great consequences which increase people total life health. It is recommended, Psychologist conduct a strong study on which of these areas is more preferred by people
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 362, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...le, a scientific research undertaken by sports practitioner at the University of Toron...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, thus, while, as to, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2176.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32029339853 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76277988302 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533007334963 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.1810206932 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.8 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.45 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154635423951 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536085703599 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065649993202 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108240718371 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103470698964 0.0645574589148 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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