Nowadays more people are choosing to live with their friends or alone rather than with their families, this trend is likely to have a negative impact on community. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Submitted by Magic234 on Thu, 11/22/2018 - 11:01

There is a belief that modern generation tend to shift away and live with their mates or even alone. While many people claim that it can be disadvantageous to the society-foundation, I consider that there will undoubtedly be several merits of this action.
On the one hand, the fact that the moving out from families has negative influence is undeniable. I think, this trend will have great contribution to the teenager's behaviours and personality which might be a good reason. In other words, the lack of control means that they are allowed to do anything they want. For instance, they may commit a crime or consume drugs which not only have negative impact on theirs future but to their well being too. What is more, it also can no longer leave their parents with no sense. By this I mean that, this trend is likely to weaken family bonds which can be mirrored in the future life of the family when it comes to death or support.
On the another hand, it is true that there is abundance of advantages can be caused by this action. Firstly, whenever individual migrates to the foreign countries he can enhance certain skills such as socialization. For example, familiarizing with other culture and locals will be a good option for this. Secondly, by living without funding from relatives, he may learn how to overcome hardships and prepare for future life. Finally, by living on their own, they try to create the pleasing environment for them to live in order to reach their goals and self-develop, so that sometimes they live with their friends who have some perspective opportunities for them.
In conclusion, even though living without family and moving out considered to be negative, i think it will play a key role in future founding.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: I
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, for instance, i mean, i think, in conclusion, such as, in other words, it is true, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1442.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79069767442 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73113141722 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581395348837 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2926159235 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.4285714286 7.06120827912 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247446365594 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.078451552591 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646147282451 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134019301692 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0711403228189 0.056905535591 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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