in countries where unemployment is high, education should only be obligatory up to primary school and not secondary school. to what extent do you agree or disagree.

Unemployment is high in few nations, so people say that education should be made compulsory to primary level rather than up to secondary education. In my opinion, I disagree that education ought to be compulsory only up to the primary level as it would be the temporary solution for the grave problem.

A good reason to not make education compulsory up to primary level is that it is a temporary and short-sighted solution. If the same is implemented, there would be a decline in the unemployment in the beginning but later it would rise above the previous level. The reason behind this is that the specialized people required for the technical jobs would not be available. Shortage of skilled people would result in the movement of industry who employee high paying technical workers would move out. Thus, it would gross up the issue.

In addition to that, it is pivotal to develop the skilled resources, for a nation to develop. A small amount of money in the young age may lure the students to drop after primary school and, therefore, less skilled resources. Since primary school teaches only the general subjects, skilled employees would not be available. This, in turn, would lead to nation importing expensive technology from other nations.

Finally, education up to primary level would give rise to a serious problem of child labour. The wages would not be significantly higher for a primary educated person, consequently, more students would opt for working even without completing primary education. It would take a nation significant amount of efforts and resources to get over this problem.

In conclusion, making education up to the primary level to solve the problem of unemployment is a temporary fix and it would hinder not only the development of a country but would also result in other serious problems.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1531.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03618421053 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81146487569 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490131578947 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3496741892 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.066666667 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2666666667 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53333333333 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222234774231 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0871480975666 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0722479226773 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146772355295 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063238417085 0.056905535591 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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