Elephants are fascinating creatures. They are the largest land animals in the world, with their long trunk, wing-like ears, and ivory teeth. We have been interested in them for a long time, and we have some beliefs about their behaviors.
First of all, we think that they can know when their death is near. Text suggests that when elephants grow older, theyare going to places near water, therefore sparing themselves from their group, and forming elephant graveyards. This can be proved by the findings of old elephant bones in these sites. However, lecturer claims the reason of this behavior is different. When they become older, their teeth become less sharp, so that they need softer food, which can be found near the water.
Secondly, we believe that they can make meaningful arts. Text states that the elephants can hold a paintbrush and they can use it to paint significant paintings. Lecturer tells this is actually trainers guiding them during this painting, simply by touching their ears, which are very sensitive and can be used to manipulate the elephants.
Lastly, people have believed that elephants are afraid of mice or similar small mammals since the Roman times, when a philosopher and a scientist Pliny the Elder mentioned about it. Text suggests there has been a recent scientific experiment to prove that. Whereas lecturer claims it is merely because the elephants are not used to mice in their natural habitate, and it is a natural instinct to be afraid of creatures that they don't know.
As a conclusion, elephants have been fascinating for us for a long time. We need more proofs to explain their interesting behaviors.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 22.412803532 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1382.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 275.0 270.72406181 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02545454545 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50722987636 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567272727273 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 407.7 419.366225166 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.0278757095 49.2860985944 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.375 110.228320801 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1875 21.698381199 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 7.06452816374 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23397963266 0.272083759551 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0837384162453 0.0996497079465 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874718874526 0.0662205650399 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160216389642 0.162205337803 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125458510396 0.0443174109184 283% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.3589403974 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 63.6247240618 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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