Scientists agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food. Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people. Others think education will not work. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

It is true that excessive consumption of fast food could adversely affect to people’s health. While some people believe that raising the public education is an effective solution, I would argue that this practice would not be successful.
On the one hand, many people argue that giving information to people helps to change their habit on fast food. First of all, according to educational programs, fast food consumers could awake that junk food consumption is an unhealthy diet, sine it contains too much trans-fat. It can lead people to various health problems, for instance, heart disease, obesity and diabetes. Moreover, some educational activities give helpful information about other healthy foods. They should be replaced fast food in daily meals, for example, fresh fish, vegetable and variety of beans. In addition, people should do outdoor activities to release calories to build a healthy body.
On the other hand, I strongly believe that educational program would not work successfully. At the beginning, many people nowadays are overwhelmed with work, so they could not have enough time to prepare meals. Therefore, fast food or pre-prepare meals become the best choice for them. Secondly, a lot of young people have grown up on a convenience foods. It is hard to break their habit. They consume fast food for a long term, sine they are not expensive to buy and very easy to prepare. In other words, almost people are attracted by delicious flavor of junk food. Therefore, they can not control their personal habit.
In conclusion, it is argued that consuming too much fast food should be reduced by education. By contrast, I strongly believe that this practice would not work effectively.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Suggestion: control their
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in other words, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1447.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16785714286 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69229579219 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560714285714 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.6690352165 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.3888888889 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5555555556 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25995398929 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.084296246665 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446438541249 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165269146606 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368291366076 0.056905535591 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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